Gwenevire

Its nice but the soon so soon mixes me up a bit. I know you can't really do anything about that... I think you should review that yourself and see ...

Well... Its good. Maybe you should not call them by the name Noble until Raven says Nobles. Right... Because Ruki does not know what they are (Right?) You should make ...

I think you need to describe the surroundings a little more. Not just the people but the trees the buildings etc. They are walking... Where what does it look like. ...

First of all I think you need to make it more obvious that there is a man in her house not a wolf... You don't really say "ah there is ...

Is that a story? I am sorry... But... Let me help you! First capatalise all you I's. For example! You Wrote: Dragons, although scaly and scary, they are still my ...

Hello there! :D A wolf story... Very interesting. Well lets get to work *Cracks knuckles* First things first... Where are you? All we know is that there is a wolf ...

Nice work! It takes me right into the story. I like it but the only thing that confuses me is the window, so maybe you could clarify that... Once last ...

Very nice work Mad! :D I think it needs a little work thought. First is first. You said scuz bag(s) a little to much (over used) It was a little ...

Its a nice idea. But I think it needs a little work! I think you should enter the room and describe the surroundings and what she looks like so that ...

Very nice work. Is it about school? Because when you said aggendas I though about school. When thought about school I though about gossip etc etc. I think you have ...

I like your use of words. But I think you should explain a little more about all his/her pains. It would draw you in a little more. Right now it ...

Nice work. But I didn't really get it about a mothers death. There are some small errors in your spelling and your "I" s should be in capitals. Other than ...

There is some very nice ideas in this story. But you repeated allot of the same words over and over again in the same little area. It sounds odd when ...

That was grate! You really let your emotions get wined into those words. I could feel it. I know how you feel because I have a sister as well! Keep ...

Nice. It reminds me of some of the nights at your house :D I love the night. I have one tip [b]You said:[/i] I slowed to a stop, a slow ...