GryphonFledgling

The beginning of this was really great. I loved the immediacy of how you put him at the point of dying before you started the story. It sounded like such ...

Ooh, this looks like it could be interesting. Biblical names important much? This could be longer and more involved. Describe the party and why it is so fun. Give little ...

*eyes Prok* No, I think you're going to bed. Like, right now. This was exceptional. Odd, yes, but extremely amusing and original. I don't know how to critique something like ...

Ooh, very interesting. This was a great beginning. Not much happens, but the voice was so intriguing to me that I just had to keep reading. The red "scarlet"s were ...

Very nice. Seriously, you are dazzling me with this story. I love the characters and the plotline and your writing. a vane sacrifice. Yeah, I think this should be "vain". ...

Ooh, very interesting. I like the post-apocalyptic feel to it. The quote at the beginning was just haunting. Picasso was a little morbid. Omigosh, do you have a lot of ...

Okay, I'm in awe of Sam now. *bows* I'm not much of one for experimental fiction, but you are bringing me around. It make take time and be a painful ...

The banter between the characters was my favorite part, I must say. It was really nice. The main nitpick critique I had was that sometimes it was hard to see ...

This was amazing. Seriously. I loved the characterization and the interaction and the description and... Geez. This was just amazing. I loved how you described the MC's goals and dreams ...

Ooh, this is an interesting plot, I must say. But I also must agree with Razor above me: slow down! It is interesting, but Ashley isn't suffering enough. How long ...

Ah, the life of the writer. And I wouldn't have it any other way. Great job of capturing inspiration and the process the mind goes through. I loved the cycling ...

Very nice. It does sounds a bit stereotypical, but it is so endearing that I'm willing to overlook it and quite happily too. And I think you meant it to ...

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Ah! Big chunks of text! *cowers from their overwhelming influence* Those are some honkin' big paragraphs you have there, and there are a few places they could be cut up ...

Ooh, the bomb drops. I really like this concept. I was trying to figure out what the connection between the title and the story was (I had figured it had ...