GryphonFledgling

Oooh, me likie. The attitude, the hook... Color me intrigued. I liked the first person here. Marra had attitude and snark, but she didn't seem to be mean-spirited. I loved ...

Well hello there! A'ight, this is going to sound incredibly nitpicky, but you really need to put names in here. I can understand putting placeholders into your story when you ...

Ooh, I like this. I keep seeing it as some sort of punk rock pop song or something. Lots of attitude, and of course, zombies! The rhyming scheme seemed a ...

Why, hello there! The love felt like lithium What does lithium feel like? You tore passed "Past". I liked this. It was quick and raw and I really think the ...

Hello hey hi! He had every reason to decline this offer , but his boss refused to let him turn down this chance-of-a-lifetime offer . Got the same word twice ...

This was really pretty, a sort of quick picture piece. The imagery was really pretty and while it got a little purple-prosey, it was short enough that I was able ...

Hooookay... Quite a bit of info-dumping here. I mean, it's like through the whole first half of the chapter, Shyla seems to have forgotten that she was hurt, her family ...

I slowly pulled myself to my feet, ignoring the pain that shot through my leg. Nitpicky, but since we're in her first-person narration and she mentions the pain in her ...

Heya hi! Just as a general impression review, I couldn't help but wonder why this guy is in this particular line of work. He obviously doesn't want to kill anyone ...

Mmm, still intrigued. This has a lot of the same atmosphere as the last chapter and again the character interaction was wonderful. With more prose around the dialogue, they were ...

Hello hi! I liked this. A few folks have said it was confusing and I agree with them to a point, but I really did like it. What mostly confused ...

Mmmm, color me intrigued. Very interesting. The idea (not to mention the title) caught my eye and I am interested in seeing how this situation came to be. Where are ...

Hello! Back for the second chapter! This was really long and it felt really, really long because of the paragraph breaks. I can see where they are and it looks ...

Oh. My. Goodness. Seriously, you had me rolling at "made rockily so by its rocky composition". Certainly answered the classic question of just how Joseph of Arimathea did manage to ...

Hey hi! Mmm, this looks interesting. It seems like there is a lot of worldbuilding and thought going into the world behind all of this. The idea looks interesting and ...