Gryffindor13

Hi! I really like the simplicity of your post. It's very elegant in that "I'm not trying very hard to impress" way. And I really like the overall message. As ...

This is amazing! There were a few mistakes (that were alredy pointed out so I'm not going to bother) but they were simple mistakes. Easy fixes. Your writing is beautiful. ...

It was an ok story. The characters were a little 2-D. I would have loved it more if you explained Jason more. Maybe something about him as an artist or ...

I loved the idea of your story. I think it held a deeper meaning for me because I used to do things just like that with my mom when I ...

Wow. First things first. Violent much? It kind of scared me, to tell you the truth. It came across as, well, violent and kinda mean. But honestly, if you wrote ...

Wow. This was a great chapter. It caught my interest immediatley. I can't find much to critique. Only one thing: Yesterday, I managed to make it to Sunday School but ...

I didn't fully understand it (sorry :( ) But I did like bits and peices of it. I especially liked these lines: The serene rigidity and straight edged silhouette of ...

That was great! It was funny, intriguing and fantastical! I loved it. For me, it could have gone on forever! That's the sign of a really good story :D I ...

Wow. This was really good! It caught my attention immediatley, which isn't always easy. The description you used was great and the characters seemed real. “Like I would put anything ...

This was really good! It really drew me in early. The dialogue you use seems so real, like things people would say to each other in reality. I find that ...

I loved it! It was really creative! Really, really good job! There really isn't much to critique that others haven't so all I have to say is: WHAT A GREAT ...

This is really good! I can't wait to read more! You make the characters feel real. By just reading the story, you feel connected to the characters. You feel the ...

Wow. Good job! This story is fast-paced and moving. At the end you really want her to go downstairs and talk to her father, you're almost willing her to go. ...

So very interesting! I can't wait to read more! I want to know where Starry Hill is and why it will help Kim figure out what to do. I really ...

Intriguing....The very last paragraph made me want to read more of this story, a lot more! Very well done! There are a couple of things I would like to touch ...