Griffinkeeper

Reviews can be quite brutal for someone that's not prepared for them. In this case, Persy was both harsh and accurate. However, she did provide sound advice, she also spent ...

Reviewing the edit! I like that you took my advice. There are a few additional points I'd like to make. "I really don't like the idea of putting you through ...

First, thanks for all the comments. I'm afraid I had to leave the work before I was completely finished. I'm in the process of adding more to the original post. ...

I've gone ahead and upped the rating to 18+. Mostly because it rattled me a bit and I'm well over that threshold.

*Moved to General Fiction Novels* I think you'll find a faster answer to your question here, than you would in the writers corner.

*Moved to General Fiction Novels*

I just love how well the character of Death is portrayed. The idea that he takes some time out of his busy schedule to rant about the souls he takes ...

This is a very well written "Dies Irae" sort of poem. The chaos that comes with the opening of the gates of hell is well described, the imagery vivid, which ...

I was hoping to demonstrate how bad info-dumping really is. Most info-dumping is irrelevant to the story and only takes away from the action. The pointless padding was intentional; the ...

I rather like this. It is very much like Shakespeare. It is very efficient, no wasted lines. I wish I had more to say about it.

Cirque, I've updated my story to reflect your comments. It was most helpful.

I spent a lot of time in chat conducting research. I even had Squalls ban me from chat temporarily; but I decided against using that scene. As for your dialogue, ...

*coughs* And, uh, where am I? Probably in some other portion of the story. The story tends to involve members I'm more familiar with, because I can exaggerate their characters ...

Hey Adam! 3-D art is good. I'll try to include more physical descriptions of the ships in the next chapter, or the chapter after. Whenever they get back to the ...

I didn't say that you didn't have a hook, merely that the hook was weak. Your explanation about Max wanting to keep the other scientists safe doesn't make sense. If ...