Goldenheart

Wonderful. Really wonderful. It was the first piece of non-depressing poetry I've seen on this site in awhile, and I was very glad to find it. I haven't any nitpicks ...

Very, very nice! It brought many pictures to my mind, especially the dark corners and home alone bit. Couldn't have been said any better! I think you used just the ...

Could I add you guys as my buddies? I'm pretty lonely over there! I'm Aure Entuluva, as I was on NaNoWriMo. So, anybody know what they're writing about? I'm getting ...

I LOVED IT! I'm astonished that in a poem of this length, it keeps your attention, and by no means gets boring. That's difficult to accomplish. And it really sounds ...

Great job!! Gorgeous! I especially loved the end of the second stanza. The poem's length was just right, I think, and your word choice was enough to be very pretty, ...

I think it's very good! I particularly enjoyed the remark about us being related to dirt. It had never struck me that way before, and I laughed my head off ...

YUCK!!! :lol: This is a sweet scenario, really. I like it. There IS something about gross-ness that makes bonding easier, though I'll never really understand it... You expected remarks about ...

Great poem! I'm afraid most of my thoughts have already been communicated by somebody else, so I can only agree with them. I loved the imagery, especially in the second ...

Loved it! This sort of light-hearted piece brightens up one's day, and makes one walk around with a big goofy smile on one's face. :wink: MORE!!! Goldie

That's funny! The first line I liked especially. I've got a question, though. When you said 'shoe it out' did you mean to say 'shoo it out' ? I liked ...

Wow. I really liked it! The irony and the contrast between the two is amazing. It conjures clear images, and you keep the piece going without getting boring. The flow ...

I liked it. The way you described the visitor was interesting... but I did notice you introduced the action in only the second sentence. This is just a suggestion, but ...

You can really get people to relate to this! Well done. It was sad, and painted a picture of what many children feel, but can't express. Bravo. The ending was ...

I liked it very much. It reminded me of the stone statues in the white witch's courtyard, in the Narnia books. Well communicated, swift style, punchy language. You included appearance, ...

This is wonderful! I really liked it! The way you described it was simple, yet powerful. The picture is pulled clearly into the reader's mind. I especially liked the mental ...