GoldenQuill

Hay there. Aushy here. :} I'm going to be a hypocrite and do the one thing I hate that people do--read the second chapter before the first and review it. ...

Hay Lena! Sorry it took a while, but here's Aushy, here upon request. ^.^ This'll be the plot I'm following for your review: I. Review ---A. Nitpicks ---B. Critique II. ...

Aushy here, as requested! :} Here's both the prologue (short) and Chapter 1. Please review, this is my first story on this website!! Don't be afraid to be picky either. ...

Aushy here! :} Here's the next part of my story. i just finished writing it so there's bound to be a lot of mistakes. I need a lot of advice ...

Hay Kanen! Aushy here again, as requested. :} And here I go... Here's the second part of the chapter. I just finished typing it so there are bound to be ...

To be a bit contradictory, I loved the whole 'drip' thing. At first I thought it was blood, but when I realized it was venom I was all, "Ooh! Cool!" ...

Here is Aushy with her review. :} (That's me :[}) *I couldn't find any other place to put this. It's not based on any actual historical figure's point of view, ...

Hay, it's Aushy here. :} Nitpicks "Come on Gaffney! Get in the car," I pleaded in an exasperated voice accompanied by a stupid grin that just wouldn't go away. "No," ...

Hay Lena, Aushy here. :} Nitpicks "Nah , you don't know me at all. And quit callin' me Danielle. Everybody 'round here jus' calls me ' Dan ' or ' ...

Hay Kan, it's Aushy here. :} First, let's get on to the nitpicks, then I'll give you your overall. ^.^ Nitpicks Soldiers, he thought. They can never hold their own ...

Very good. I really enjoyed this. I only found one problem, but then I have one opinion. ^.^ “To my Love I have never met...?” This should be, "To my ...

Here's me, randomly commenting again. ;P Okay, you know how in anime when people mention something bad that happened, they immediately tear up? I'm starting to feel that anime vibe ...

Okay, so, I've been reading your chapters for a while and not commenting, but now I'm going to. :} I'd just like to say that before, the whole thing where ...

Hallo Ben. I'm Aushy, and I'll be critiquing your work today. :} Alright, so, here's my nitpicks. "food", That should be "food," . I know, I thought it was that ...

Hallo. I'm Aushy, and I'll be critiquing your story. :} Let's get right down to it. I know how hard it is to keep in a 1,500 word limit. I ...