GoldenQuill

Hallo. I am Aushy, and I shall be critiquing your work today. :} It was very nice, your story was. The only thing that slightly confused me was the thing ...

That was good. It was really good, I must admit. You didn't explain your surroundings enough. While it did all make sense, I didn't really didn't get a feel for ...

Woah. Woah. Woooooah. That was so FAST! When people read stories, they like to get into the story, feel what the character does, look through the character's eyes. Unforunately, you ...

I really did enjoy that. Honestly, I did. I only found one problem, and it sort of bothered me. In some places, you were much too fast. For example, we ...

Hay sweetie. Sorry I didn't come earlier, for some reason I couldn't find the link to this story. :O Anyway... This was a very good chapter. I did enjoy it. ...

I'm here. :} Alright, so, here's my things. ^.^ It was very good, but I noticed a few things that kind of distracted me from the story the entire time. ...

Hay, I'm Aushy, and I shall be critiquing your story today. :} Cynthia was reading a book when her mum came in. Cynthia was a real book-worm. Although reading is ...

It's hard, and nearly impossible, to critique something when it really happened. I haven't done it before. First, I'm going to critique it as a piece, but then, I'll critique ...

Well, it seems as most of the grammar mistakes have been pointed out, so really, I have no reason to be posting, right? Wrong. I wanted to come and comment ...

Finally Aden's posted something on YWS!! You don't mind nitpicks, do you? “You should think be you act, Jared.” Jason lectured him Did you mean to say something like, 'You ...

Hey! Alright, here I am, FINALLY reviewing this work. xP I would sit and face the sky for hours, or stood beside a pond, ignoring everything else and just tried ...

Hello! *glomps on nit-picking* " Nothing I give the little missus will ever satisfy her. M'lady I think the child is deaf or dumb. She won't eat, sleep, talk, or ...

*completely agrees with Lily* It's kind of weird, I had a similar experience. I had a pet lizard. Okay, five, but what does it matter? So what when I was ...

Guesssss whoooooo? x[} First off, I just want to say that was good. *gives gold star and all* Good job, Lils! Next I want to elaborate on a few things ...

Hey there! =[} NITPICKING TIME! xP consisted of her bed, her dresser, and a bookcase. It wasn’t very big, but It was a cozy, and a little place for Kerry ...