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Thank you ms. Suzanne for the quite... honest... critique. Well, lets start off with the line breaks. they really have no point, other than thats how I thought the poem, ...

perhaps, my good friend, the poem only seems jolting to you, because you are assigning to it a rhythm that is not there... try reading it in a different way, ...

let me state this right now. there is a reason I wrote the poem this way... well sort of... it is NOT about suicide... well, it is, but it isnt, ...

well, i was slightly surprised to read it, go to comment it, come back and find the ending massively different. I kinda sorta liked the last part of the last ...

I feel I should also make a point of something else, when you commented that no-one had told me how to live my life, you did not take into account ...

Thanks all for reading this, but again, I think some of you may have assumed it had more meaning than It actually did, this was just a casual poem I ...

Thank you both, yes my rhyme scheme is scattered and inconsistant, but its kool, and I like short poems, thes three are meant to be a set. and i might ...

this is odd, ive gotten into the habit of critiqueing my critiquers well, first off, i'd like peopple to comment more on the content behind it, rather than the superficious ...

thank you all, especially Charliebo, who's reply i found most helpful... and i think i will change it too "whilst" thank you. I guess i shouldnt be surprised that nobody ...

So, I have read thy poem, and then read the comments. It was a very powerfully moving poem, and Mr. Gandhi was one of the most amazing people I have ...

Thank you all, for the replies, but I have to say, I agree with the Novices, no, the last line is NOT out of character, It's a statement. It needeth ...

Thanks both of you, and yes, to answer your question, the meaning of life is plainly, just living. To live your own life the way you think you should. and ...

yeah, it got better towards the end, it just started out a bit choppy.

well, for one, the main character was actually a girl. i dont think i mentioned that though, did I? and another, ive re-written this since then, so its a little ...

Short, sweet and to the point, this poem would make a great card, I like the way you made it have a sort of... i dont know, innocence to it ...