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Re: Done
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Mar 24, 2016
Hello I'm Goblin70rd. First, I would like to say that the repetition of practically brothers bothers me. And when it says "(Like a lightbulb, it hit him.)" I thnk you ... -
Re: JL 7011 Ch 1 Part 1
Yes, this has helped me a lot. Thank you so much. The next part will be better!
Mar 5, 2016 -
Re: JL 7011 Ch 1 Part 1
Thank you, what you said was really opened my eyes. How would I convey my characters feelings more? Or make it so you understand what they are feeling?
Mar 5, 2016 -
Re: The Queen of the Cogs
Great poem, I really enjoyed reading it.
Mar 5, 2016 -
Re: War of Legends-Chapter 1, The Beginning
Hello, come to give a review. I like it. It's intriguing, and as far as I can tell it's all good. I hope to read more.
Mar 4, 2016 -
Re: War of Legends-Chapter 1, The Beginning
Hello, come to give a review. I like it. It's intriguing, and as far as I can tell it's all good. I hope to read more. Keep writing!
Mar 4, 2016 -
Re: Val: 2
Hello, here to give a review. First, the only thing I found wrong was the second to last paragraph, "were package deal." I think "were" is meant to be we're. ...
Mar 4, 2016