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Re: 4th June
Hi Gahks, Press gang flashes camera Man holds up line of tanks carrying nil but a shopping bag Driver shouts from tank Cries, protestations, agony, fire, bullets split the sky ...
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Re: It hasn't a name yet.
Hi JemimaPuddleDuck, If a swan, in its pure white elegance, was capable of the constant flittings of a bumblebee; If the solid oak, with roots deep would yeild the sweet ...
Jul 7, 2009 -
Re: What I Know
WRITE WHAT YOU KNOW. What do I know? I know about school driving on freeways those geriatric bastards in the fast cars video games herpetology mental disorders politically correct names ...
Jul 7, 2009 -
Re: Lost Cause
Hi Krupp, Feeling small, weak as dust. I’m falling far, too far for any hopes that something will break my fall. There was no lie created for us that we ...
Jul 6, 2009 -
Re: A Bridge of Colors
Hi bludragon, A bridge of colors hangs motionless in the sky. Rays of color play across the sidewalk, still wet from the storm that just passed. The collision and incompetence ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: Friends
Hi twilightgirl, This doesn't say anything. Basically, what it does illustrate is that you have a bare, basic concept of what a friend is - something that the reader already ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: This Stupid Crush
Hi silversunlightx, Shivers roll down my arms Like an avalanche It almost hurts This reaction Bad transition from one extreme to another. It would make sense if one was parodying ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: Back to Back
Hi ashleylee, Droplets of dew fall freely Time has stopped racing Together we stand You and Me We You say you were going for powerful images but what I see ...
Jul 1, 2009 -
Re: A Little Girl
Hi Selin, A little girl, Standing curious and quiet. Looks nervous but, Confident and patient. So she's curious, quiet, nervous, confident, and patient. What do these words have in common? ...
Jul 1, 2009 -
Re: Drowning
Hi whatever, He pushed me to the hard ground as the other two held my arms down. I squirmed as their grip tightened and stopped the blood circulation. He got ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Loss of Eden
Hi Angel of Death, We walk down to the beach, the once gold sand and the perilous blue sky-reminding me of what used to be. Why is the sky perilous? ...
Jun 25, 2009 -
Re: Love
Hi purplepastelpretty, Post pieces that are recent. Unless you're saying that you somehow have the exact same feelings that you did years ago, this poem is irrelevant and a waste ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: He's Mine
Your eyes locked in mine With the fierceness of a Lion on unsuspecting prey. I unwittingly reeled for a few Moments; I was completely Enraptured by your smile. Okay, at ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: The Boy Who Cried Wolf
Hi Black Rabbit, He lies. He is made of lies. He is made of lies, and nothing more. He lives to tell me lies. Lies that, through their filthy existence, ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: 13 reasons why...
Hi pshhxhoney, There are thirteen reason why i slowly die inside The phrasing as well as the concept of "slowly dying inside" has been overused to the point of death ...
Jun 20, 2009
