Galerius

Hi 200397, Not a very good piece. The worst parts of this poem - and be assured that there are many - are the thoughtless spaces put in between stanzas ...

Then don't respond. ------------ Hi Kylan, What's with you not incorporating and building upon one theme? Yes, Russian Revolution, circa 1917, okay. Oh, and the illustration of the red Communist ...

Hi Jennafina, The dancer stumbles out the back door and into the alleyway. He leans against it, and as it closes the sounds of music and voices backstage die away. ...

Hi Beautiful Doom, Imagery is your main problem. Storyline and plot is also skewed but the magnitude of the lack of description, and what I call pseudo-description, overshadows all other ...

Hi Kamas, The first explosive impact sets off a ricochet of charges through willowy tissues, taunt with spiteful, precise needles threading themselves from the cusps to the core, that shudders ...

Hi AquaMarine, Go ahead, rip it to shreds. I'll be happy to slink back to Other Fiction. Yeah, mos def, girl. Degrade yourself before the poem starts! That's the way ...

Hi OverEasy, Ridiculous. I don't care if this was a true story or not or whatever. The non-fiction piece is incredibly naive and uninteresting and goes downhill from the first ...

Hi Audy, R oun d and r oun d, Why the odd italicizing? The only reason I can possibly think of is that perhaps it is intended to demonstrate a ...

Hi Kamas, I am inundated with the seasonal enemy Bacteria and thinking while fighting a war is not a thing anybody is able to do, least of all the politicians ...

Hi Zenjoy, I'm trying to decide whether this is brilliant or terrible. Currently, it's a mix of both and while it smells like fresh wood and scents of silk, it ...

Hi Kyllorac, A quick little poem prompted by a random word generator since I haven't written any poetry in a while. And this product is exactly the reason why writing ...

Hi Jon, Well, this poem was dead on arrival and barely sputtered out something coherent in the last stanza before falling back to its endless sleep. ~ It's like running ...

Hi silented1, First point of order is to take out all of those ellipses. If you want a pause - or really any kind of deviation from standard reading - ...

Hi iQuippie, This piece suffers from a sliding hill upon which it clings desperately with dirty nails, trying to ascend liquid mud that once used to make up the composition ...

Hi wonderingkate, Everything about this reeks of cliche and Valley-Girl-private-notebook fantasy. "I'm sorry that I wasn't good enough"? How many times has the reader heard that before? A hundred? A ...