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Re: The fall of a kingdom
Hi, This is GG! I want to say that i was surprised by the ending because i expected Sophie to be older since she seemed so responsible and mature. Also, ...
Oct 11, 2017 -
Re: Spruce Woods (The Eastcliff Series #1) - Chapter 26
This is my first time reading this story, so i don't really know what's going on, but i like the fact that even though i don't really know what is ...
Aug 2, 2017 -
Re: our kingdom
Hi marmalade! I hope you have a nice day! I just want to say that this is a beautiful poem. You really have a way with words and how to ...
Nov 23, 2016 -
Re: need help
Hi nishthabawa2896! After reading, i really think you put a lot of feelings into this. My idea is that if he thinks you don't understand him even though you do, ...
Oct 14, 2016 -
Re: Chapter 1
Hello! First thing that i noticed when reading your story was your organization. I noticed that you tend to mix dialogues and descriptions together, making it hard to follow. I ...
Oct 9, 2016 -
Re: Advice
Aye, hi! I must say that i tried and failed many times to sing this; and i finally came to an agreement that i could only rap this one out. ...
Oct 2, 2016 -
Re: Chapter Four
Hi there! From reading your story, i feel like you should have more description of the scene actions. You have an equal balance of dialogues and descriptions which i think ...
Oct 2, 2016 -
Re: I chose life
Hi there! First of all, this is a very emotional piece of writing, and i am really sorry for your grandfather. Your writing and the way you describe him also ...
Oct 1, 2016 -
Re: The Beast Within
Hi there! From reading your story, I've found some minor changes that have to do with your organization. You have some conversations that i think should be separated into smaller ...
Sep 30, 2016 -
Re: Are They Real?
It looks like your goal is fear in this poem and you've achieved it! The way you write the poem makes it flow smoothly. You also left a sense of ...
Sep 29, 2016 -
Re: Dear Jess. From, That Girl You Probably Don't Remember.
Before i write my review, i want to say that i am so moved by your title. I have the exact same problem, and i can clearly understand your writing ...
Sep 29, 2016 -
Re: Not SO Imaginary
To be honest, your poem gives me goosebumps! Had that actually happened? I mean you can describe that so clearly that its easy for me to paint that picture in ...
Sep 29, 2016 -
Re: I don't understand
Meaningful and sad. Seriously. I don't know if you post this for a review on the poem or an advice on how you, feel, but i am telling you both. ...
Sep 29, 2016 -
Re: Irrationality - Monday
In my opinion, i think that you should balance the conversation part and the description part equally. Its like your conversation part nearly takes up most of the page. It ...
Sep 27, 2016
