FutureFamousWriter

Your writing has gotten better since the last time i read it. Yeah, i've been away for awhile and decided to come back. I had year 10 issues. Anyway, about ...

I like it, yet you need to rewrite it so that it flows more easily. I had a little trouble reading it, but the storyline is great. Maybe instead of ...

i love historical stories because i love imagining myself in the past. and the image you create in my head made me feel like i was apart of your story. ...

Really good, i like supernatural stories. Some mistakes which i think are just typos were: “The wolf pack that lived in the forest had a litter not to long ago.”- ...

Love it as always! i love the playfulness in the characters and Ela determination. Send me the next chapter as soon as possible! i want to find out who gets ...

i'm sorry to say this but your intro is full of mistakes. Some are: “when I looked around the room and he wasnt their!”- Its THERE. “ " hmm more ...

i'm hooked! what a great prologue! my prologue for one of my stories is really short too, so don't worry too much about how short it is. i'll post it ...

good, here are some quotes to keep you motivated! “Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every ...

really good! well, creepy but good. here are some good quotes that are related to death: “If death meant just leaving the stage long enough to change costume and come ...

good, only one mistake i could find: %u201CWhy do she like him better than me?%u201D its why DOES she like in better than me. Unless you are trying to sound ...

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!! the imagination behind it is truly brilliant! however, there are a couple of things you need to fix up: “I felt suddenly naked without him well, ...

With the bit that says “That’s it I won't tell him and everything will go on just fine” I think you should add a ! or a , because when ...

Love the tension, love the language, love how you hit readers with the cold heart truth. The way you hit readers with the realisation that things like this really do ...

I do not want to be a pain or anything, but the last sentence " I drifted to sleep" is so old and used its not funny. I know personally ...

Awsome! i first joined up today and decided to read one of someone elses chapter before posting mine and yours was the first. I LOVE the ending sentence. It leaves ...