Freakette

I enjoyed this, I thought I wasn't going to because it seemed like the average "wah I'm not like everyone else why can't this guy love me" thing but it ...

Wow, this is really spooky but it's well written. It gives a clear image of what's going on and it flows nicely. Your slight use of vernacular in the language ...

The concept in this story was honestly really nice. I really loved the idea of someone's last night together, and everyone coming together and putting aside their differences to just ...

Hello! This is an interesting idea. I'm curious to know more about this secret and who it is that she's missing so much, but at the same time there are ...

Wow, I really enjoyed the language you used in this poem. I also like that it doesn't have a rhyme pattern, rhyming poems aren't really my thing. Definitely keep up ...

This has the potential to be a really awesome story concept. The only thing I really have an issue with is the grammar. Whenever someone new speaks, they get a ...

Aw, it's cute and sad. The character description for Flora is wonderful, it made me smile. The detail is excellent, perhaps a smidgen overwhelming at times, but regardless, it brings ...

Hmm, this is the first chapter I've read, but it's still very easy to follow, good job. The writing isn't too descriptive, but not bland, a nice medium, it's easy ...

This is your first poem? Wow. It's better than anything I could write in terms of poetry. I really love the message I'm getting from this, too. It's really well ...

Hahaha, I liked this. The poor guy, though. Loved the interaction between him and the cop, lol. xD It's a pretty cute beginning to a story, really casual and entertaining, ...

Oh, I love this. It's simple, but it stays interesting enough to keep the reader hooked. Great language, great grammar, not really anything I can find wrong with this. Character ...

Well, the plot I'm getting from this is nice, but the other comments are right, you need paragraphs. It's a bit hard to read properly with all these sandwiched bits ...

This almost seems like it's about you... But my goodness, the grammar here, it makes everything rather unclear. I agree with the above comments, you should try studying the styles ...

This is a very captivating story. I like the plot so far and the language is good, but perhaps a bit over-descriptive? The grass was pressed down where I had ...

This is really good, I like the language a lot, it flows easily. Also, the plot is interesting. It makes me wonder what Aaron may be thinking later on in ...