FlyMyButterfly

Holy...moly...That was simply beautiful and touching. I felt as though I can relate to that very much. I felt like Marie during this story and it reminded me how strong ...

I love the way this story was written. It was short indeed but I was crying by the end. For some reason, this story really got to me, but I ...

Watch out for overused words in your story such as... -could ... remove about 1 occurance -it/there ... remove about 15 occurances -that ... remove about 6 occurances & -was/were ...

I thought it was very well written and I feel as though it almost relates to my life in a way. I think this short little story has the ability ...

Very good overall. I just have a few technical things to say however. Be careful with things such as bias language-- {A young lady in a belted peacoat and boots, ...