Flossie

Glaring at me with those eyes? Is this meant to be a question if so it doesn't make much sense, maybe it would be better as 'Glaring at me with ...

usually I don't like poems about crushes and loves. But I like this poem. I'm not sure about the title it's a bit to blunt I think it needs to ...

I liked it, it has a 'vibe' about that when you read it you feel like your watching this girl's life die. One question (a silly on really) any way ...

I personally like the first poem better, it paints a picture and gives an image in your mind. the second version is choppy, it doesn't flow like the first version. ...

Good job setting the scene, it hooks the reader in right at the start. The good thing about is it's realistic. A few spelling mistakes and tell us more about ...

Okay the repitiveness is good some people can over do it but your is in lttle bit size chunks I like that. But the poem becomes a tad preachy. i ...

It was interesting, the title's good. But there is something about which makes you wonder if the writer's got some hidden meaning to it. So instead of enjoying the good ...