FloralTiara

You've got an interesting start, and I'm rather curious as to why Bryleigh wasn't normal anymore. The only complaint I have about this is the opening line. While it's fine ...

Well, this isn't bad, but it certainly had room to grow. Quite literally. You could go on and tell a huge tale about why this girl was stabbed, rather than ...

Hello there! Like the others, I am here to review! Okay, let's start with the first thing I noticed. You don't start each sentence with a capital letter. Even just ...

Well, this story seems interesting, and I would love to see where you go with it. Okay, there's one line that confused me, unfortunately, it was the first. James Caraway ...

Hello there! Well, overall, your story is very good, but I have a few little things I'd like to point out. Hopefully you'll find them useful! Okay, the first thing ...

Okay, I'm here to review. I actually found this very entertaining, but of course, there are a few little tiny things that I'd like to point out. Though the majority ...

Hello, I'm here to review! Anyway, it's pretty good, but there are a few things I'd like to point out, to help make it the best possible story it could ...

Hmm, where to start, where to start. Oh, let's start with five simple words. I absolutely love this story! Your writing style is wonderful, it's not boring, but it didn't ...

Well, it was certainly interesting. In a good way, of course. Now, at some points, it reminded me of the little mermaid. (The Disney version) But other than those few ...

Though it's rather short, it seems you've got an interesting idea to start with. Do you plan to extend this? If not, it could make a good blurb... Someone's probably ...

Okay, I just finished reading, so I have a few things to say. The first thing; I really liked it. Your idea seems interesting, and I'm a bit curious as ...

Aww, that was pretty cute. As both people have said before me, there is a bit too much dialogue, compared to what there is with descriptions and etc. I think ...

Pretty cool! It was interesting, but very vague. Not so vague that the reader just ends up tilting their head in confusion, but vague enough so that someone can make ...

Well, that was interesting to say the least. I'll definietly read some more if you upload it! Oh little thing though. Several times you use the word "Angles." Do you ...

This is a great story, and your descriptions are interesting to say the least. There are a few little things that I noticed though that are very easy to fix. ...