FlocculentAnorak

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I like how you repeat the same stanza. I normally dislike repetition in writing, but when it's written well and fits the type of writing, I can't resist it. I ...

I love stories like this, but many are from the perspective of the victim. Yours is different. The narrator's thought process describes how much he loved Jake. how delusional she ...

Thank you for the comment. Yes, that is something I forgot to cut out. In the program I write on that's supposed to be a scene break, but it shows ...

This is very realistic and meaningful. The words are simple, yet empowering. It relates to how people act like the trauma isn't as affecting as it is. That people are ...

This is a great short story. I love the way you describe it in your writing. How vibrant the narrator's thought process is. You write the harmful relationship beautifully, showing ...

I love your choice of words. It describes what is happening in the scene, and helps envision it in my mind. Great poem.