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Flemzo

  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Secret

    Reviewing as you politely asked me to do so in chat! Pretty good, I think. If I'm not mistaken, this is an allusion to the Creation story? I'm gathering that ...

    Nov 26, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: when the rain beats down on the porch & there are tsunamis in your photo albums

    I'll agree with Sigyn: the melancholy tone is what makes this beautiful. Not sure if this was your intent, but this feels, to me, like a poem of loss. You ...

    Nov 22, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: The Colours Shaped Me, Father

    Hello, there. The following is a review from someone who used to be really good at reviewing, but then he took a few years off from the website, and now ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Health Re: Another Truth: Saying Goodbye

    First, hello. This is the first review I've done in literally years, so forgive me if I'm not clear or you aren't quite sure what I'm trying to say. When ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: You see

    You look at me, through weary eyes full of prejudice; I don't think you need this comma. Strike it. the hard thums on the wall Hard thums? Or hard thumps? ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Li river

    on entreprenureal exhaust That was really the only mistake I could find. Excellent work. The only thing that really bothered me about this poem was the lack of punctuation. But ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Raw Art

    mild forms of mental illness do contribute to creativity. THANK YOU! I've read so many essays without thesis statements that I was starting to wonder if they even existed anymore. ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Silence of Pain

    I feel you on every little bit of this. Stuff like this is really hard to write, especially when you're still in the thick of it. But thanks for sharing ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: He Fell

    Funny! This reminds me of something I wrote a while back between two criminals. I chose to take a more in-depth conversation to move the story along, but this was ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Inamoratas - The Beast Inside Of Me

    The sound of footsteps fills my ears. I stop. I wait. I listen. Normally, I abhor paragraph breaks like this. However, I love it here, because it adds to the ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: The Underworld

    So you get up, brush yourself off, and head into the abyss. This line, where to begin. Good Lord, it's amazing. Some people imagine going to Hell flailing and gnashing ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Good-bye Greg

    my virtue remains quite in tact. I believe "intact" is one word. no boy will ever know what lays beneath "what lies beneath." It's a subtle thing, but a thing ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Fall of the Morning Star

    They are, or once was, so softly asleep Mistake right away: you've mixed up your singular/plural forms. "Once were " Oh, how brilliant were they, Okay, I see what you're ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Canoe Tritina

    I've never heard of tritina, so that's what drew me to this poem. Overall, a very listless poem, which is good here, since it's about drifting along in a canoe. ...

    Aug 28, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: Prologue: Storm Clouds

    Some of the crowd applauded madly, but most clapped halfheartedly, glowering contemptuously at the stage. Holy adverbs, Batman! That's a lot of -lys all in a row. Too many, in ...

    Aug 28, 2011


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