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Great job! I agree with Anonamuse that you mean rough not rogue. Rogue means all what Anonamuse said but also means a kind of make up. I also agree with ...

I read chapter 3-5. This is the review for all of them. Great writing! But I think that it was a bit too fast. They were just looking at the ...

Once again, all the mistakes are pointed out. This is great! Normally, I wouldn't really want to read this type of story but you write them really well. Keep it ...

One part didn't seem to fit into the rest of the story. I spent my empty and boring days highlighting all the lies that God told those poor Jews. I ...

This is great! I caught something that doesn't seem right... I didn't notice it the first time I read it but... Velma sighed, whipping up a bottle of water and ...

A few things. We have no idea what the revenge is. You should explain that more. The thing with Eric liking Calix was completely unexpected and I agree with Bear ...

This is GREAT!!!! One thing though... “I wish I could help,” Steven murmured. The tears seemed to disappear as I smiled over at him, “Actually…there is something you can do,” ...

I like this! Once again, others have beaten me to nitpicking. Sigh. Ah well. I liked the stalker part. It's fascinating that Chester is very interested with the MC. It ...

This is FANTASTIC!!! I loved how you ended it with that sentence. How do you do this? Do you have a secret elf or something that write for you? :roll: ...

I think you should take the 'oh's out. And this part: My heart aches to My head says no That doesn't really make sense... Why would your heart WANT to ...

Everything wrong i see is already pointed out. Nothing for me to add. And about what Chern said, i disagree. I have a gay friend and he's really good friends ...

Great! Only one typo that i can see. “I’m fine, just—can you give me a massage for a second.” I think it should be a question mark not a period. ...

Good job! I couldn't find any typos. Though some of it was confusing. Was Calix going to Chad's house? And i'm not really clear on whether the house was chad's ...

I agree with Summerless. You don't need that comma in the second sentence. Also, who's Lepus? We have no clue who she is. “With pleasure , ” It should be ...

This is great! Several mistakes, yes, but otherwise, I love it. It was a bit tedious at the beginning but quickly got interesting. I have met they’re clones and I ...