I read chapter 3-5. This is the review for all of them.
Great writing! But I think that it was a bit too fast. They were just looking at the sunset, then they went to a dance club, and the next second, they're in the bedroom, kissing. That's really fast. The cruise was like, 5 days long. So they had plenty of time to build a relationship so.... Think bout it.
Keep up the great work! When you write something new, lemme know.
Alex
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