Fizz

Love. Love love love unconventional style. The beginning may be a little bit too short, with the four lines of a single word. It is a little bit off putting ...

Waves are pretty much my favourite thing to write about, so I really like this. Arching glass hitting shore Genius. One thing though. This needs punctuation, desperately. It just doesn't ...

First I have to say, I too write about things I have no idea about. Such as stories written from the point of view of someone with Autism, stories about ...

Oh gosh. You just did the impossible...you see I hate rhyming. I HATE HATE HATE IT. But I loved this! I love so much I want to make it in ...

The opening is so so good. You set up where (and sort of when) the story is set, which really took my attention away so when you mentioned the grave ...

I have to review this, because the first review was nothing more than mean and unnecessarily disparaging. I actually think the use of the second person is quite good. Addressing ...

I like how short this is. In poetry clarity can be a good thing. I do have to agree that this could use more description, or just less generic description. ...

This is really good. Very atmospheric. I have only one thing to say that hasn't already been said. remnants of early morning rain, the slightly acidic smell permeating the air. ...

Okay so I'm going to get this out of the way so I can write something helpful I HATE RHYMING No, I actually really like it. I love the sentiment ...

This really sounds like lyrics to a song, more than a poem. Although that could be the rhyming. Do you read music? Have you considered writing music? Because you would ...

Constructive it is :) lies a secret-- deep within. This sounds a little bit cliché. You hear a lot about things deep within hearts. Especially secrets. I can see the ...

Agreed. Full stops make reading a lot easier. Unless you want it to sound rushed, like one long stream of thought. But really, it was quite distracting. I think it ...

This is really sad. So sad. I think you have a really great grasp of language, especially emotive imagery. I can't see much to criticise about this, except to make ...

I really love this, the imagery is great. This is going to be a terrible review, but I needed to say that I too think some of the earlier advice ...

I have to agree that the format is a little bit confusing, but I think it just needs a bit of fine tuning. I can see that the sense of ...