Fireweed

there's some really lovely things in here... i love the way you worded the last paragraph. your character is intriguing; I'd love to see more. A few parts seem a ...

Sorry, im not especially brutal. this is pretty awesome, but SHORT. i see lots of stories like this: fascinating,well-written, vivid images, intruiging characters, and all that good stuff, but little ...

i really like the first stanza, its cool and has very vivid description. the mood seems very...distressed. the second stanza is kind of choppy. choppy isnt neccasarily bad, but it ...

really awesome and powerful... one of those great poems that just leaves you speechless, takes your breath away. i love "he has been pillaged and abused, my once perfect muse," ...

its a cool idea, but it was rather vague; it didnt really speak to me... Coming closer and closer faster and faster. Teeth sharp as daggers paws so big , ...

disturbing...yet funny 8) :lol: :shock:

this is really sweet but not to the point that it is cloying. i agree with snoink that the line about plaid shirts and doritos is awesome- very unique. i ...

ummm.. well, this is awesome... i dont really have much to say that everyone else hasnt. usually, since i have the attention span of a kangaroo after drinking a frappucino, ...

i like this alot, nice and short, puts a vivid picture in my mind... it made me smile. i like how the rhyme is really subtle and casual; i think ...

COOLIO!! very well-written; the descriptions are awesome, but like snoink said, the plot gets a little drowned out because theres so much description... this was alot easier for me to ...

i like the idea of writing a poem on the bus. very original. the poem, however, was nice but not especially unique or memorable. perhaps if you made it longer ...

GREAT. so simple, yet so effective. often a few lines will say SO much more than lots of false fancy words... i admire your ability to keep it so simple ...

it was a bit too repetive too really hold my attention for very long. anaphora can be very effective, but its easy to take it too far.i know because i ...

hey jane!! sorry i took so long to post on this. this seems really interesting, lots of potential. well- written, good description. i found it a bit confusing, but i ...

yet another poem that i like but dont understand... there are puzzle pieces strewn across dilapidated, wooden tables, and we try to revive the remnants by forcing the corner-angles into ...