Firearris

Dear Diary, Hey, and of course it's me! I will be starting kindergarten soon! O.0 PLOT HOLE! Kids are still starting to learn how to write in kinder garden! And ...

Hi Jeni! I'll do the next three chapters right away, if I don't have to go to bed first. I will also do the rest of the works you posted! ...

Hi Luna! I agree with Firestar, after the first five lines, it seems different. I only saw two mistakes when it come to spelling and grammar. As his freinds are ...

Hi Darkdove. Same as the others, I can't tell what the theme is. I don't really like it because of that, but if the theme was more clear, then the ...

Hi Vernon! Here are my comments: Many of the men and adolescent boys had tried vainly to flirt and gain his sister love, but she politely refused, gradually the refusal ...

Hi Jared! Here are my comments: “What d’ya mean, a body? A people body?” XD XD XD XD XD XD XD No, Harry though Harry thought of him, reading to ...

Hi Jared! Sorry for taking so long, but here are my comments: Courtney and Sammie it read. Either put the "Courtney and Sammie" in Quotation marks, or make it italic. ...

Hi Stars. I like this poem, you have great rhymes and powerful words. I think you put a lot of emotion into it. The only thing I see is that ...

Hello Adnamarine. You really need to space this out into paragraphs, it would look much better and cleaner, and it is easier for people to read. Meggie wandered over to ...

Hello Derek! This is much better than the last one. ;) This is an interesting story idea, can't wait for chapter two! Anyways, here are my comments: body hit many ...

Hi Madhatter. Here are the mistakes: "Thank god for endorphine" already pointed out, don't confuse it. ;) It is a thought, so I think you should get rid of the ...

Wow, I like it! The only thing is that you should have some full stops in the beginning like: I feel like my individuality is being swallowed whole and leaving ...

Hi geek! The rating is good at about PG. like everybody else said, Info dumps are annoying. Here are the rest of my comments: of their father.They put a space ...

Hi! Here are my comments: I say was because Jimmy's try: I say 'was' because Jimmy's Lady wants Is "Lady" a name of a person? If not, this needs to ...

Hi Reak!!!! “fairy tale come true,” I Think this should be re-worded. It just doesn't sound right to me. Our bond is stronger than those clichés. I had noticed a ...