Firearris

Hey there, Geronimo. I'm Firearris, and I'll be your reviewer today. ^^; Okay. This isn't too bad, but it can definitely be improved. Dialogue and formatting seems to be the ...

Hey there, Gothic. Okay, so I think this story could use some work, especially with punctuation and grammar. There's something that makes me feel human i did not know what ...

Hey there, Denia, and late welcome to YWS! Okay, so I agree with everyone else when they say that it was gutsy/brave for you to put up a journal entry, ...

Oy, guys. This is a topic from nearly two years ago. It's best not to bump up old topics, since likely by now the author isn't working on this piece ...

Hey there, Georgie! I'll be your reviewer. ;) The uniform was quite boring; white button down shirt with an ugly looking logo on it, dark green woollen jumper also with ...

Hey there, Ross! I haven't seen you in quite awhile. Interesting piece, here, on to the critique! “Hello?” “Chloe? I really need your help right now.” It’s her. I try ...

Hello! Haha, I remember seeing that in Barnes and Noble, I think. Also, you could have probably posted this in the non-fiction forum, that's where most people post essays they ...

Awesome job, and that is such a pretty picture! The only thing that bothers me is the font. Maybe change the type so it matches the theme a little more? ...

Hello there, Jessiica! This is interesting and a nice story, and it has lovely potential to be a bit better if you worked on it. I think the main thing ...

Hey there, Vernon! This is a very...emotional poem. xD For the most part it's decent, there are only a couple of things that bug me. 1. You are using waaay ...

Hello there, Rivercool99! I'm Firearris (Or Heather, whichever you prefer!), and I'll be your reviewer today! I have to say I liked this poem. It's short but it kind of ...

Hello there, Butterfly! I have to agree with Kyllorac. You should get something like Open Office or maybe use the Spelling Check build into the YWS posting system, as well ...

Hey there! Alright, for the most part you have stuff like punctuation mistakes, so I put my corrections and suggestions in red in the quote below. :) Sunday 6 Th ...

Greetings, Robz, and a late welcome to YWS! I'm Firearris (Or Heather, whichever you prefer), and I'll be your reviewer tonight. =D Nice poem, haha. It describes exams quite well. ...

Greetings, NeverendingPages! I'm Firearris (Or Heather, if you prefer!), and I'll be your reviewer tonight. For the most part I like this poem, except for one little thing. The 'He' ...