FatCowsSis

Thank you so much!

Thank you so much! As far as the scary thing goes, it seems I am much better at writing frightening poetry as opposed to happy poetry. I'm glad you enjoyed ...

Okay good to know! Thanks for clarifying :D

You are so very much welcome! And I apologize, I'm not the best at criticism, but I hope some others have helped you more in that area :)

Haha thanks :) most of the poems I've put on YWS are like this....

Thanks! And I left out her on purpose...'cause I'm weird

I love tacos!! And though I think this is a major part to the story, I could've put it in italics at the beginning of Chapter 1. But that doesn't ...

The rhyme is ABCB/DEFE/GHIH/JKLK/MNON

Yeah the bed thing sounds much better :D and I understand the couplet! I do that too lol...

Thanks!!!

Thanks! It was my first attempt at humor. If you look at my other poems they are usually dark and depressing.....

That any better?

Crap. Sorry forgot about that..

Succeed not succeeded

They rhyme....