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Hey Bubbles. ^^ I saw that this had no critiques, and I thought I'd throw in my two-cents. I really loved this. Your narrator's emotion was well-presented, because it wasn't ...

Hey Rosey! ^^ Thanks for the request. Let's see what we can do here. :arrow: First line? Meh. I really think you need something less of a narration there and ...

Hey Galerius, here as requested. ^^ I see you already have some reviews on this, but I'll just throw in my two cents here as well. Alright, so. I think ...

Wow. Tigger, I am thoroughly astonished that this is your first piece posted on YWS. Really, what have you been waiting for?!? :P Okay, so I see that you already ...

Hey Adna! ^^ I guess I've decided to go around critiquing all of Jon's crazy prompt contestants. I will say, I really enjoyed this poem. It made me think. I ...

Hey Music. ^^ Evi here. jon's going a bit whacko with his prompts, don't you think? xD I do agree with Jon here that your main issue is rhythm. When ...

Lin! :lol: Here we go. I'm in the mood for brutal honesty today, so bear with me if I sound harsh. Dead as the rat's dying carcass Lying on the ...

Hey Twilight! First of all, let me caution you about something. I assume, because of your name, that you like Twilight? And here you're writing a vampire love story? When ...

Wow. So, Sela, my lovely fellow Catholic! :lol: I thought this was wonderful. I know you don't want nitpicks; there isn't really much to nitpick on anyway. Your characters' voices ...

Wow, Mars, I really enjoyed that. It was extremely well written, despite how short it was, and I (personally) don't think you need to expand it any. I got a ...

Hey Jen. ^^ See you've reverted back to your original alias? :P I must admit, I am thoroughly glad. I can only stand so many undersea sponges in this world. ...

Hey! How're you today? I'm going to call you Xangel, because we already have a couple of members named/nicknamed Angel on the site. Is that alright? *loves nicknames* :P Okay, ...

Hey Kyllorac! I've seen you around and seen you in Chat a couple of times, so I thought I'd drop in on your lonely little poem here, which I must ...

Hey Conrad. ^^ I don't think I've ever critiqued your work, although I've certainly read enough pieces to know that you're a talented writer. I'll see what I can suggest ...

Hey Jared! I don't think I've ever critiqued anything of yours, although I do know I've read a couple pieces. I'll try my best at this particular (and very short?) ...