Evi

Hello Maria! I'm Evi. First of all: you might want to check out this tutorial on Dialogue Punctuation. Those dashes are unneeded. Also! Don't use ellipses (those ... things) in ...

Hello! Sorry for the delay. Poetry reviews aren't my best, so please take this all with a grain of salt. Galerius said a lot of what I would've said, so ...

Hello! Evi here. So, you tackled a very deep and interesting subject here. It seems like the bare bones of a philosophical essay of some sort, but since you put ...

Hey Born! Sorry for the delay. ;) It was nice that you waited a while between posts, though-- gave me time to catch up! I don't like the gap you ...

Hello Kammie! Congrats and featured work. This poem had some beautiful, beautiful moments, and as a whole it's hard to critique. But, when looking at individual phrases in here, certain ...

Here as requested! I haven't read any of the other chapters, so I'm going to avoid talking about plot if I can, and focus more of writing style, since that's ...

Hello! The previous two reviewers pretty much covered every grammatical issue I could point out, so proofread through this and you might want to check out this tutorial on Dialogue ...

Hello! I'm Evi; nice to meet you! You should proofread your writing before you post it on YWS! It makes things easier on reviewers if there are fewer grammar and ...

Hello Ludicrously Idiotic! The nickname possibilities for your username are endless. Personally, I think I'm going to call you Ludicrio. The small establishment housed coffee, lattes, and cuppa chinos

Hey! I'm Evi. I liked your poem. You have some very nice images, and everything seems to flow together very cohesively. a jaded sky sheds it’s pearly blue skin Typo ...

Aloha, Gal. Here I am, ready to try and extract cohesive and/or tangible meaning from your glorious melting pot of poetic phrases! I look to Deathand ask her why, she ...

Hello! Hope you're enjoying yourself on YWS. All I could hear was my own breathing. Missed a word! ^_^ You’re welcome. Now you need to go and visit the Elder,” ...

Hello again! ;) “You must be Noah,” She she said softly . It wasn’t a question. He didn’t reply. “I’m Mildred. I’m the one who wants to adopt you.” “Don’t ...

Hello Giant! I'm Evi. I hope this review is helpful. I rested my head on my desk, my mind drifted away from work and into what happened only 1 year ...

Hello! “Where are we going,” I stop walking and tap his shoulder waiting. His feet slow, turning to look at me, he speaks “Does it matter where we’re going,” his ...