Evangelina

Thanks for the crit! Just PM me for whatever you need.

Thanks Coll! -a bit edited-

Tanks Bella! :]

Haha. Thanks.

Actually I live in Arizona, but Mongolia is way more exotic :] Yeah, I gave it today...I think it went well.

I'm giving it tomorrow! Glad you liked!!

Wait, so they jumped on here and ... her in the middle of a 7-11?!

Well the automaton is walking through this land, which is scientifically/technologically altered/fake. It sits and remembers a past when he used to be human/ or "back in the day"...you know... ...

...then don't. Poetry isn't all about rhyming.

I edited the first line, and "automaton" is a fancy word for robot. Thanks!

It's the way you rhymed...but it doesnt matter anyways :S

I actually quite enjoyed this. But one thing: You ATE Anne Coulter? EW!

Whoa... I am completely in love with this. Like totally. I love the idea of Frankenstein taking the place of the crazed docteur. Great job, really. Look forward to more ...

Stanza three is my favorite by far. Your rhyme scheme seems fine! The ending was odd, but althogether a worthy read, if not a little bland. Well done! -Evang.

I know I've said this before, but please refrain from what we call the "grocery list" form. Don't list things, poetically express them. Best of luck, -Evang.