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Evalynne

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Supernatural Re: Satan's Children chapter 2 part 1

    Hi! I'm here for a review for you! :) Okay, so first off this was a pretty interesting piece to review. You have what seems like a solid basis for ...

    Jan 4, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Keepers of the Daring Truth - Chapter 2.5

    I really love this, and the character is very well-developed. I just noticed two sort of flaws in this. One was your informality. Most of your writing is written formally ...

    Apr 3, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Realistic Re: my story choater 1

    Well, um, I don't really know what to say... Um, okay, hopefully my review will help you to improve! 'hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

    Apr 2, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: The Chains of Duty Chapter 13 (part 1)

    Nidara squinted at the page open in front of her. In a size much smaller than the rest of the text, was written a chunk. She strained to read it. ...

    Apr 2, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Prologue // Phoenix Arising

    Oh, I finally found this again! I was EveningSharks, but I couldn't log on and so I made a new account, which is this, so I shall now proceed to ...

    Apr 2, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Meniscus

    Hello! Eva(lynne) here for a review! Gosh, I haven't done on eof these in simply AAAAAGGGGGGEEEEEESSSSSSS, and do excuse my informality there, I promise I shall not do such a ...

    Apr 2, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Mightier Still Ch. 2 - Restoration

    Ooh, this is interesting! I like it! Your grammar is mostly spot on, but it seems that there are some errors in it. Well, actually, quite a few errors, but ...

    Feb 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Affection growing more affectionate

    Hi! It's me, here to do a review on this piece of work! Hopefully you won't find this to be too harsh, although, quite frankly, there is rather a lot ...

    Feb 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Chapter One

    Okay, review time! Eek! Great start! Though this is only the first chapter, I already feel I have gotten to know Cyrus very well, and I have to say, if ...

    Feb 10, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Crazy Little Love Story (5) So We Meet Again

    Wow! First off, I'd like to say that you are an amazing writer! I love the idea of this piece, and your imagery is beautiful. Your grammar is just about ...

    Feb 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Fantasy Re: Dear Princess

    Wow, this is so, so good! I love your metaphors and imagery, and I also love the overall idea of your poem. It is really well written, and although I ...

    Feb 9, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Gray : Present Two

    Hello! I have not used the site in a while, and reading your work reminded me to come on more often! It it is a very interesting idea, and I ...

    Feb 3, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Never hide this life

    Hello! Pleased to meet you! Um, first thing to note: The rating. It's E - Everyone, but it includes swearing? Probably just a mistake, but I thought I'd point it ...

    Dec 30, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: f

    Hi! First off, can I say that this is a really good idea for a story, in my opinion, and I can't wait to see where it goes! I love ...

    Dec 30, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Unknown Youth (Working Title)

    First off, I'd just like to say; this is really good! You've certainly set the standards high for this site! I love the plotline, and feel this is very interesting. ...

    Dec 29, 2014


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