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Affection growing more affectionate

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''You can't find me Hannah''.

''And what if I did ? '' Shouted Hannah from the corner end of Eternal Cottage's backyard.

'' Then I'll marry you. ''

'' Promise me ? '' asked Hannah cautiously.

'' I promise''.

Chapter One

''G'morning Sir'', greeted John ( the secretary of Eternal Business and Management Institution)

''Good morning John. Now first let me know about the recent EBMI updates''.

''Sure sir. Actually we've been looking forward to meeting with Mr. Patrick Carl , the co-executive of Superior Business Marketing ( SBM ). It is one of the preeminent and vying company in our stock market.'' Replied John firmly.

''And would you be really kind enough to tell me what has that to do with us ?''.

''Sir, as you know that our market value has taken a nosedive to 10 % within this present month, so I fear we would lose the dominance of our future acquisition as-well. Whereas SBM is moving up too fast, having a great influence on World Market. Meeting with SBM members will not only provide us with their motives but will also make grounds for a partner-ship potential.''

''Oh, I see. But don't you think a meeting with the SBM staff would rather let them know about our motives and dealings ? Why should we go after business-men to let them get hold of ours ? It sounds to me senseless to accept a so-called powerful company's offer at this very stage when we know our company's at a loss because this is what I have always wanted. To do everything myself ! John, you've been working with me since 15 years and I guess 15 years are quite enough for one to let somebody know completely. I love to compete and this is the best chance. I can't jeopardize my career, this company's fortune and most importantly the lives of the hundreds and thousands of workers by getting into any kind of partner-ship with other companies. We'll work it out some other way.''

''Whatever suits you best, sir.''

''Thanks John. By the way get me the details about upcoming Chinese stocks as soon as you leave my office''

''Alright Sir, I should better get leaving this very moment. Have a pleasant day.''

''You too.''

Jack William, the son of (late) EBMI head William Dulas, in his early thirties was a man of great charm. His tall and elegant physique had won him the most handsome boy's title back in his college days. He had deep set blue eyes, a little droopy with upwards curled lashes. His smile was what got most of the girls a heart attack. He had a beautiful and pleasing smile. His face was considered an ideal among many, because he had a v-shaped face which is very popular in Western societies. Apart from his looks and charms, he had a great deal of admirable qualities as-well. His personality had been built-up in his early years of life when he preferred playing chess and solving mathematics word problems while most of the boys of his age went out enjoying worldly pleasures.

Jack was illustrious for his shooting and horse-riding abilities. He had always held up a high commendation for out-door games and this was the reason why he feared nothing. He had always been ready for new challenges. He liked moving on for new adventures as he had already seen half of the world when he was hardly 14. The reason for this was obviously his tenacious financial background. His father owned one of the top businesses in the World Market and was counted in the filthy rich class.

''Hello, is it Mr. Jack speaking ? asked a polite voiced woman.

''Yes, who is it and how on Earth did you get my personal number ?''

''Oh good Lord ! Well, Sir I am speaking from the European Press and Media. We just heard about your market's drop-down recently ... so .. er.. We'll highly appreciate it if you have a live show with us. It got me .. uhh sorry us very struggling.. to get your personal number. It will be certainly valuable to have you on our..''

''Don't bother please, I respect your concern but I am having a tough schedule. I'll make it up some other time, thanks. Bye.''

Line cuts off...

Jack William was a man of great power and classic standard. He kept his priorities high, in which dating with girls, hanging out with friends and wasting time on unwholesome stuff was not included.

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''Ahh , So I finally caught you Jackie badass''. Exclaimed Hanna in a joyful voice.

''How do you consistently come to know about the place I hide in ? '' inquired Jack.

''Ummm.. kind of serious question, shall I tell you the truth or trick you as always ?''

''Ofcourse I am not kidding around. Tell me the truth.''

''It's actually the fragrance of your soul that brings me to you. I can smell you and feel you because you are a part of me ''

''Hannah, I really don't know how to delineate my affection in such a pleasing manner. You are just 18 and you already sound like a complete grown-up. You don't know how much I like you and the way you talk.'' assured Jack.

''Why does It always slips off your mind that I am only five years younger than you. It's not that big of a deal. Just wait until I turn 18, I swear I am going to give you a troublesome time''.

''Aa ha, ohkay ohkay madam, stay low-key. Your this daunting evil side scares the hell out of me. And you too wait till you're 18, I swear I am going to turn this world upside down for you pretty angel. My father's business will have grown ten times bigger by then and he'll probably please me with the honor by sparing it into my hands. I will then take you to Chicago, Toronto, England, UAE, Turkey and above all Las Vegas where we will have our honey-moon. How does that make you feel Hannah honey boo ?''

Without even once looking into Jack's eyes, Hannah scrolled her head down and slowly started weeping. ''This can't be possible , This can't be possible ... This is just a dream, this can't be possible'' Hanna kept on telling this to herself quietly.

It legitimately couldn't have been possible because Hannah was the daughter of a servant. She was the daughter of Muhammad Rashid, an Afghani and old servant of Eternal family. He had first come there as a young boy and was soon accepted by Jack's family because of his keen skills. Rashid married a Muslim woman named Asma who was very appealing but they were soon separated as Asma had to take care of her family in Afghanistan and Rashid had to go back to USA to continue his job. Rashid monthly sent his home a large sum of money. After two years of their marriage Hannah was born. She was not the first child. Asma had given birth to three sons before too who had died while still infants. When Hannah was born the whole village prayed for her long-life. Her granny had even got her a 'taaveez' as-well, which is a necklace that protects one from evil-eyes. This was a religious belief of Muslims and soon was adopted as a culture. Hannah's mother died when she was six years old and the cause of her death remained uncertain. Hannah by then was looked after by her paternal granny and when she too died Hannah was sent to her father from the village. Their village was a very back-ward one, with little or no facilities at all. Rumors had it that there were many days when people slept without having food. When Hannah had first come to the Eternal's she was in a complete poor situation. Her appearance was what made the whole family wonder whether she'd been living in a village or a jungle. Her dried-out face seemed to have been unwashed since a decade, nails long and dirty, eyes too filled with dust. The clothes she was wearing were half-torn with it's color faded away. It were the Eternal's who actually managed her ticket from Afghanistan to America.

''Rashi just get her in the hot tub and clean her up like a mirror.'' Jolie ordered Rashid to give her a bath and make her wear the pink-polka dots frock which she had bought two days earlier when she got the news of Hannah's arrival. Jolie was a middle-aged woman whom William had married. He first met her at his twentieth business's ceremony. She had a calm face with round-shaped eyes and a pleasant figure forming like a pear at the bottom. The color of her eyes was hazel blue and she had peach-colored full lips. She soon fell in love with William at their first conversation. She enjoyed William's good sense of humor and the way he threw off jokes. They soon got married.

The sight after her clean-up was totally unexpected. The whole family was surprised to see Hannah who was looking like a little princess. Her complexion seemed fairer than milk, her little nose reddened at the top, high cheek-bones giving a pretty touch and big brown eyes.

''Wow, those eyes are like the head-lights of a car'', complimented William hilariously and the others smiled. '' Rashi you never told us you had got such a pretty daughter.''

Rashid blushed in return. He felt very pleased. The time Rashid had heard about his mother's death, he was too tensed thinking about bringing Hannah to him. He was furious about William's and Jolie's reaction. He thought they might refuse and then he would have to go back to Afghanistan, leave USA, leave such a handsome job, leave all the easiness he found here and once again start a rough life back in Afghanistan only to keep him and his daughter at ease. This thought made him feel more sick. But the reaction from William and Jolie amazed him mightly. Their reply was ''Sure Rashi, you can bring your daughter here. We'll treat her as part of this family and most importantly Jackie will have a good time with her. It will do no harm having her around. We'll book her ticket tomorrow, don't worry.''

Rashid in reply couldn't murmur a word, instead he bowed down his head with his eyes closed and hand on the chest.

''Hannah, why are you crying ?'' Asked Jack.

''You know I don't deserve all this. We have a big class difference between us. It will not be fair to you if we get married. My father has been uncle William's servant since a long time so our marriage will be a betrayal to your family. You people have already done a lot for us, so much that even if I become a billionaire then, too, I won't be able to pay you back.'' Hannah said it with many pauses, she started weeping again. Jackie could see her sobs rolling down her cheeks and felt a little emotional too.

Hannah was a great deal upset about hers and Jack's making up a couple. To her, the most distressing matter was her belonging to a poor family. She stressed that marrying Jack would bring him and his family shame. Hannah more often discussed it with Jack whose reply remained the same ''I don't believe in this bullshit. The only thing that matters to me is your attitude. If you're happy with me then fuck the whole universe.'' He said it with a sigh, while tightening his grip on her hand. This gave Hannah some hope.

Jack thought of something funny to make up her mood. So he added in a very serious tone ''Oh yeah, now I remember how much we've done for you. It's good that you've realized this so soon or I was afraid you might find a handsome guy and run away with him, leaving me and my family regretting.'' On this Hannah gave out one of her erotic explosions and Jack too laughed on her laugh.

''Oh GOD, you're always in an enlightened mood. You'll never change.'' Hannah teased him being herself again.

''Do you want me to change. ?''

''Never.'' She never meant that, she never wanted Jack to be changed. She loved him the way he was and enjoyed every bit of his talk. Hannah always thought that she was a nobody in comparison with Jack, but the way he treated her was no less than treating a queen ... and that meant all.....explained all..... illustrated all....

''Hannah I love you.'' He whispered.

''I love you too Jackie sweetheart.''

Chapter Two

*Alarm ringing*

Jack heard his cell-phone ringing. His eyes widened when he saw his watch, '' Holy Shit ! 8 : am .... The meeting must have started !''. He suddenly wore a white lined-patterned shirt on his blue trousers, hastily tied his tie which he had learnt recently and above he wore his navy-blue jacket, sounding like a perfect gentle-man. Without wasting a single moment he went down for his car keys and started off.

Jack lived in a luxurious apartment in the city's most industrialized and expensive location. He had bought the apartment because it was only two blocks away from his office which made it convenient for him to set up plans even on Sundays.

He reached his office soon and ran for the meeting room. The meeting took about two and a half hours. Jack felt too drowsy as boring meetings often made him feel sleepy. However as soon as the meeting ended Jack headed toward his own office on the 27th floor of EBMI building and felt relaxed while leaning back on his chair. He took a brief brake and during it had lunch with Ben, his close friend.

Ben was a working agent of social affairs and did a lot of social work. He traveled almost all the world, making his way around many cases like sexual harassment, child labor, early marriages, prostitution and some other minor crimes. He had studied with Jack in school and at college also. Ben was a simple person with a decent personality. His only aim in life was to minimize the extent of crimes. He was awarded by the USA International Social Institution as one of the top social workers of the society. He had an alluring personality. His small green eyes made him look highly attractive which was the reason he went after many girls. He had been flirtatious since his college days. He loved sleeping with beautiful women and persuaded Jack too but he always refused.

''Hello Sir ''

''Hello, who is it ? Asked Jack through the phone with chewing the bite in his mouth. Jack hated attending calls on his personal number as he was at every moment looking forward to planning something new, but the calls usually ruined his mood.

''I called you some time ago if you remember, I am Amanda from the European Press and Media.'' She took some time and started again ''Sir, I can have a few words with you privately if you are not comfortable with the media. This is the only favor I can do to you. It will be for your company's benefit, believe me.''

''Ah, you've got to be kidding me. You are telling me to have a private meeting ? Look lady I know this is your work but I have a lot more things to do which I consider more important than this. Thank You. And please next time contact me on my official number.'' Jack was too frustrated and confused. Nobody had ever done him a favor neither did he starve for any body's support. Jack guessed some body was trying to troll him over the phone so he played his part well.

''I'll think about that. Take care.'' With this Amanda ended up the call.

''What ..? I didn't get you, you know who you're talking to... you media people are just disgus...'' He couldn't finish off with his line as the phone was already cut. Jack ran his fingers thorugh his hair in a much tired way and on at the other end Ben eyed him suspiciously. ''God this woman, she's lost her marbles. She is not letting me breathe.. I don't understand how did she get my personal number '' Jack told Ben in a puzzling voice.

Ben laughed for sometime and started pulling Jack's legs. ''So, this woman.. what's her name ?''

''Amanda.. '' Replied Jack.

''Oh boy ! You might have not even remembered the name of the first girl who proposed you in college but you proved keen enough to know this ordinary media person's name... What should it mean ? See, this woman .. or maybe girl whoever she is, got your personal number and asked you up for a personal meeting. The meeting, sounds to me more like a date.'' Ben winked and smiled at the same time. Jack didn't know what to say as he knew Ben very well. It was not his first time. He liked teasing Jack and many times asked him to enjoy the world outside his official work too. He always used to tell him about the thrill he got while making love to women specially coming up with new love-making positions from time to time and how he liked having trips all abroad to get different women in bed. Ben was a highly enthusiastic person, who made the best out of his life and work. He believed in the opportunities life always gave so he pushed Jack too to realize. He tried a lot to change Jack's mind, to awaken his lost sense of sensual feelings but it always failed. Sometimes Ben used to tease Jack by saying ''Brother you're going to die a virgin ''.

If I don't get her, I will.

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''I can feel the warmth of your mouth'' Hannah told Jack who was standing at the side of her, both pressed against the wall.

Not long after she arrived, Hannah had won the hearts of all, specially Jack. They both started playing with each other and rapidly became best friends. It took some time for Hannah to learn English and Jack helped her a lot in this regard. Soon both of them became each other favorites and shared everything. Jack's family, too, liked Hannah a great deal because of her exquisite nature. The only person who didn't like Hannah was Scarlett, Jack's elder sister. She was sixteen when Hannah arrived at the Eternals and never kept a satisfying relation with her. The reason was that after Hannah's entering into Jack's family she felt greatly left-out as the family had always given her the full attention and had all her wishes fulfilled. A tinge of jealousy used to hit her whenever she caught her father appreciating Hannah for any work. Hannah had too many a qualities. She knew painting, dancing, cooking and later learned singing. William had gotten Hannah admitted in Scarlett's school which led to more conflicts. Hannah stood first during all her exams and participated in nearly all the competitions never returning empty-handed. Scarlett observed it all with keen sight and told her mother about it. Jolie could understand the teenage jealousy and, therefore, handled the situation very sensibly. She told Scarlett about all the hardships Hannah's parents had faced and how alone she was, with no one in her world. This made Scarlett's mind change ; but only temporarily.

''I want you to feel more than that.'' Jack then slowly kissed Hannah on her pink lips and went for her shirt. He interestingly unzipped her shirt and started licking her neck. Hannah felt too moved, she always enjoyed the way Jack did these things in. Jack could feel Hannah's welcoming expressions and grew more passionate. He took off her undergarment and for the first time saw her little breasts. He ran his fingers through her brown nipples and held them tightly. Hannah lightly moaned. She was 18 then and Jack 23.

Jack had always wanted Hannah as his life-partner. They made a terrific couple ; with Hannah short and Jack tall. There were times when Jack used to pick Hannah up in his broad arms and gave her a swing. The first time Jack asked out Hannah was on her 15th birthday. She, too, was small at that time but there stood no chance of refusing Jack's proposal. They only used to kiss eachother as Hannah never allowed him to go beyond that. But this time it was different. She was 18

''You have got beautiful bosom and those nipples are too cute. I wonder what will become of them once you grow up and step into womanhood.'' Jack said sounding again boyish and funny. Jack had just got his father's features. He had a brilliant mind and good sense of humor. He knew how to throw off a joke and carry it without sounding silly.

''Shhhh... You're not supposed to talk like that.'' Hannah told him with a shyful look. She was a shy girl when things came to romance and love. She never allowed Jack to touch her body and once she nearly got angry at him when he had first time asked her to make love. Hannah held her religious and social beliefs on top. She knew that sleeping with somebody before marriage was unlawful and considered 'dirty'.

''Why do you always stop me from what I wish to do ?'' Jack said it a little angrily. ''Can't you see how fun is it to get in our teenage forms some times ? I am not going to let you win the argument this time. I love you and right now I am proving it''.He then pressed himself tightly against her forcing more on the bottom. He kept on kissing Hannah for half hour and then he lay her down. Covering himself over her. Hannah too took off his shirt and ran her hand through his whole body. He had never felt so happy before. Jack moved himself forcing more on the bottom side. Hannah knew what was coming next. She hastily stood up and said, '' You remember our deal ? No game of losing virginity.'' This astonished Jack but he managed himself trying to keep calm.

Hannah again started, this time more patiently, '' A good girl must never lose her virginity to somebody else, except her husband. I promise I'll give you everything you are longing for once we're married and lawfully considered as husband and wife.'' Jack could do nothing but nod in agreement.

He thought to himself ''GOD, who will wait for that long! ''.

Chapter Three

Jack William sat in his Mercedes and sped off for the airport. He was looking forward to flying to Paris. As soon as he got to the airport he wasted no moment and went for the boarding. After that he was shown the way for his plane and there he was, seated in his seat comfortably. But the person who was seated next to him didn't feel comfortable. She continuously blushed and wanted to say something but couldn't. However she got enough plunk up to say, ''Hi.'' After such busy and tiresome working days Jack wasn't up for a conversation. Though he gave it a try and said ''hello'' leisurely.

''If I'm not mistaken you are Jack William, right ?'' She asked excitedly. Jack wasn't surprised at this because he knew he'd been a good topic these days in the media and business world. Still he managed to ask her how did she know.

''I am Amanda , we've talked twice on the phone.'' Jack was not ready to hear this. His sleep went off at once and eyes widened. He couldn't believe the person who had been forcing him since many days was actually seated right next to him. His expression and reaction both were neutral.

He collected himself and spoke up ''Oh well, Yeah I do remember. Sorry if I'd been rude on the phone.''

Amanda was pleased at his response and made a joke ''No problem , people who make it big are usualy a pain in the ass. We deal with such people from time to time. Now pardon me if I am being rude.''

Instead of getting pissed off or angry Jack stole a quite laugh and when he couldn't resist he burst out into a huge laughter. He hadn't done it in months. For some time he saw his reflection in Amanda, that deep reflection which had faded away in himself a long time ago.

''Haahh. Okay tell me something about your self Amanda, you work for the media and press ?''

''No, they work for me. I am the head of European MP.'' She paused for sometime and after looking at Jack's surprised face expressions she added laughingly ''I know you must be thinking about those calls that I made to you. My team has been asking you for an interview since the last year so - err - to be honest after hearing about your stubbornness and refusal I thought I should ask you myself. I got your number from Ben who is my sister's ex-boyfriend and we made up this plan. Sorry for everything.'' Amanda ended with a deep breath.

Jack was now even more curious. He knew he could expect this from Ben. He gave way to a slight laugh and said '' Well, Ben is only to blame, and as far as your part is concerned I'll see with you later.'' Amanda blushed at this very sentence and Jack sensed that too.

Amanda's appearance could be only distinguished as 'simple'. A girl in her late twenties with a bold and confident personality. She wore glasses and always applied hot-pink lipstick. Her clothes seemed to be official , white pant shirt with a green badge at left. She used to wear a scarf around her neck which made her look attractive but she was too simple and when asked about it she firmly replied, ''Simplicity is the best.''

''Surely, you owe me something at least.'' Amanda said it winking.

They chatted for many hours, asked about each other lives, told funny stories of their friends, exchanged their views on politics and social issues. Jack soon liked Amanda's point of views and appreciated her concern on specific issues. Jack had never seen this side of himself, he had never been so active during his past years. His sudden growing ineterest in talks sounded odd to himself even.

At last they exchanged their addresses as Amanda was on her official work to Paris, later she was supposed to travel to Spain and Turkey as-well so they'd both decided that before her travel to Spain they would catch up on the coming weekend. With this Amanda went her way and Jack on his without realizing how soon they had reached Paris. It was for the first time in Jack's life that he didn't feel drowsy or lazy while travelling ; instead he was more active and enthusiastic. He checked his phone to see the time and saw Ben's message which read ''Hope you had a sexy time with that professionalized lady.''

''Oh Good Ben !'' Jack said slowly and took out a relaxed breath while still smiling at his company with Amanda.

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Everything was going fine in Jack's house until one afternoon when the secret love of Jack and Hannah had been revealed in the most unexpected way. Scarlett had already sensed what was going on in between her brother and the servant's daughter. She always observed Jack's happiness and style of talking with Hannah with great suspicion and to turn out her suspiscion into reality she decided to catch Jack and Hannah red-handed. Her worst motive was to have Hannah's value dropped down in-front of her parents, so she made up her mind that whenever she'd smell something wrong happening she would take her mother along with herself. By that time Scarlett spent much of her time with Hannah. She kept a large stone on her heart and God knows how did she manage to have conversations with Hannah. Hannah, who was too innocent couldn't figure out the reason behind this sudden kindness. She told herself that Scarlett had changed and never let negative thoughts spring up in her mind.

One afternoon, when the weather was too sunny everybody was resting in their rooms (the servants too), It was a daily routine at Jack's house. Jack and Hannah always kept this time for their meeting which Scarlett never knew of. This was what made Scarlett think that how was it possible for Jack and Hannah to meet when all day long they were surrounded by servants, daily visitors and family members... She gave it a hard thought and finally chose afternoon time for inspection.

Like always, Jack and Hannah were to meet the following afternoon as-well. Jack took Hannah upstairs on the tree-house that his father had built for him on his 7th birthday. Jack spent most of his time there taking Hannah along excusing that she'd help him in his drawings. Not even a single member of the family had aroused suspiscion over them. However, Jack and Hannah talked to each other for sometime and after that Jack leaped toward Hannah talking dirty. Hannah laughed and laughed. Meanwhile Scarlett hurried toward her mother and asked her to see Jack and Scarlett. At first Jolie didn't understand why she said so, she refused saying she wasn't in mood to do that now as she was still half-slept. But Scarlett pushed her mother by the shoulder and said It was urgent. Jolie agreed.

The kissing scene of Jack and Hannah gave Jolie goose-bumps. She couldn't believe Jack was half-naked and lying on top of Hannah. She immediately stormed in and shouted at both of them. Jack at once stood up feeling embarrassed and Hannah half-conscious. Jack tried to convince her mother over and over again but she wouldn't listen. Poor Hannah was as scared as anything. She started crying out loud, not knowing what to say or what to do. She blushed very badly.

Jolie's reaction was the worst one Jack had ever seen in his life. She warned Jack that she would go and tell this to Rashid on which Hannah ran and held Jolie's feet, pleading not to tell anyone. It was not long before their apologies that Joile agreed and asked them to never attempt such act again. Late in the night Jack fought with his mother over such an enormous behavior of hers.

''Mom, that was not the way how you walked in and started at us, what would have that made Hannah feel. You know I'm not a kid anymore, I'm aware of my good and bad ; so is Hannah. And you know that I've kissed many girls in my school life but you never made any objection, then why today ?'' Jack was unhappy about his mother's attitude, he knew that his mother had never done such thing before. He had kissed many girls in his school and his mother too knew the names of his girl-friends but she didn't keep calm that day. What bothered her was the very thought of Hannah making a couple with her son. She assured herself that they were a no match.

''I think you have gone insane ! C'mon Jack, come to your senses. You know what are you saying ? Your girl-friends all came from well-off families and we had been in good relations with most of their parents. You remember once your 5th grade teacher had called upon us and complained that you spent half of your history class bunking along with Rosi and kissed her behind the school's swings. If u recall that event I hadn't even scolded you let alone slapped or beaten up you. And you know the reason why I didn't take any strict measure ? Because Rosi was the daughter of CIA's Chief Executive Mr. Graham Shaw, not a daughter of some gardener, cleaner or worker Rashid.'' Jolie was too exhausted and asked Jack to change the topic. Jack was badly hurt by what her mother said. He never knew her mother could say this type of wicked thing.

He couldn't stand it and said aloud, ''I don't know what do you think of Hannah's background or social status. I love her. I have nothing to do with her father's occupation because I'm not going to marry him. And as long as Hannah has no issue with it, I will appreciate it more if you, too, recognize this relationship. Dear mom this is 21st century, we're not in the old 1960's that we have to judge people by their cast or creed. I am really sick of this race discrimination and it gives me pain and sorrow when I see people like you acting so superior.'' There was a sudden roar as he paced across the room.

''What the hell are you just spitting out of your mouth ? William has spent billions of dollars on you to make up your personality, he showed you half of the world whereas Hannah would have hardly seen her own city's park. I can't even think of your marriage with that bloody cheapster, it will bring us nothing but shame.'' It was out of Jolie's control now. She was going to win this battle at any cost.

They argued for almost two hours ending up too sick and tired. She asked Jack to leave the room as she didn't feel like wasting energy on such unworthy thing and retired herself to sleep.

On the other hand Hannah couldn't sleep. She kept awake thinking about what had just happened and regretting that it shouldn't have taken place. But all was done and her crying on split milk was of no use.

A week after this incident everything went normal. Jolie spent most of her time walking and gossiping with her childhood friend who was one of her old neighbours, too. Her friend Jessica had smelled that something was going wrong. Jolie, at first, didn't intend to tell her about it as she thought telling her about her son's affair with a servant's daughter would sound very awkward. But on the other hand Jolie needed a wise advice which could be only given by Jessica. ''What's wrong ? I've been noticing this upset look on your face since many days.'' Jessica asked curiously.

''It ...err... '' breaking the pause Jolie finally spoke up ''It's about Jack and that asshole Hannah.'' Jessica didn't get what she suddenly meant by the term 'asshole', as only a month ago she'd been talking about Hannah in kind words appreciating her manners and skills. Jessica had known Hannah from the time she'd arrived at the Eternals and was fond of her. When Jolie revealed Jack and Hannah's relationship to Jessica, the latter was as shocked as the former.

''When did that fucking happen ?'' Jessica, instead of calming Jolie, started on. A true friend would be never supposed to do such a weird thing. She had known Jolie's weaknesses long ago and found every single chance to snap at her in order to break her pride. Now she was making Jolie even more ashamed.

''I came to know about it only a few days ago. Jessy, can you for God's sake help me out of this. I can't figure out any way. I and William have done more than much for Jack. You know he's our only son, we've fulfilled all of his wishes, have made him grown into a brilliant sport and now we can't compromise all our harwork over a poor girl.'' Poor girl...... the words echoed enormously.. Jolie could herself feel the words buzzing around.. She continued with her so-called sad story '' So, you see this is one hell of an impossible task for me. I can't do it alone and I don't even want William to get knowledge of it. I can't see him hurt either... Jessy what should I do ? I'm badly trapped.'' The case was not as much as Jolie exaggerated. She didn't realize how happy her son was and how happy he would further be if Jolie accepted their relation whole-heartedly.

''I have a great plan and I am damn sure it's going to work. If not permanently but atleast would calm things for some time.'' Some time, too, was a lot of time for Jolie. She eagerly sat with her on her garden's bench and was all ears. The plan that Jessica had in her mind was awful. It was not only unfair to Hannah but to Jack as-well. Jessica had told Jolie to say 'yes' to Jack and pretend as if she was happy in her son's happiness. This was surely very difficult to do. Jolie knew she was a no good actor but she had no other option either.

''Tell him - no don't tell him - just assure him that you have no problem with his and Hannah's affair and apologize for your initial wild behavior.''

''And then what ?'' Jolie asked impatiently.

''Then you send him abroad right away making any study or work excuse before he gets suspicious and when once he's gone, your way is all cleared up to Hannah. You know she's a rat so you needn't worry about her.'' They both grinned at the master-mind idea. Jessica was playing a typical villain's role in two lovers love-story which was totally unexpected of a third person.

''Bundle of thanks. Jessy, I don't know what would have I done without your kind support.'' Jolie was really thankful to Jessica for coming up with such a sensible plan.

''Don't thank me now, thank me after you get rid of Hannah.'' Jessica said it with a chuckle.

''And that time is not so far.''

''Mark my words.'' Jessica spent the whole evening with Jolie preparing her for the ugly role most of the mother-in-laws play in Indian serials. And unexpectedly Jolie played marvellously.

Chapter Four

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Jack, who was very surprised at his mother's sudden decision couldn't find a right way to thank her. It was like a fantasy becoming real. The only issue which Jack had over his and Hannah's affair was Jolie's attitude because at the end of the day she was the master of the house with everything done according to her will.

''Oh ! Good Heavens ! Thank you, thank you so much mom for accepting Hannah. You don't know how grateful I am to you. I .. I can hardly wait to blast this news over Hannah's ears.'' Jolie in return only gave a pleasing nod.

Hannah's reaction toward Jolie's sudden changed statement was received in more astonishment. Though she always felt small in-front of the Eternals she had to fear nothing as long as she had Jack's back. As long as........

The only people who had no knowledge of it were Scarlett and Rashid. Jolie had stopped Jack and Hannah to not let them know for the time being. She promised she'd reveal the news to everyone in the house once William came back from his official work.

A week passed by easily and fastly. Jack and Hannah now met daily without caring about anybody. In this week hands were held, kisses exchanged and promises made. But the week faded away soon and Jolie had to come up with a news. A bad one.

Jolie had booked Jack's ticket for England already and it was due the following evening. This was the dreadest turn-out in both Jack's and Hannah's lives. The moment Hannah got to learn about it she feared she'd lose Jack forever. Jack who was surprised on this eleventh-hour travel couldn't make up her mother's mind as Jolie said Jack's father William had called him to himself for a short period of time. But it was nothing like that. William had left England one week before and was now in Singapore for his four-months official training. Jolie and Scarlett had made this plan to get Hannah out of Jack's mind.

''You are leaving this afternoon ?'' Hannah wept as she asked Jack in a broken voice. She was broken from inside also. She couldn't imagine living without Jack. Her life seemed to have ended, the dream Jack had shown her seemed to have ended and above all the love which she had held for Jack since child-hood even seemed to have ended. But there was nothing she could've helped with.

All was done. Everything arranged. Now there was no backing off.

''Yes my heart-beat, I wouldn't have ever left you if daddy hadn't called me. But I'll return as soon as possible and that, too, on one condition.''

''And what's that ?'' Hannah asked impatiently.

''You have to promise me that you'll take care of yourself and keep writing to me from time to time.''

''Okay, I will.''

''That's like a good Hannah honey boo. By the way what shall I bring for you ?'' Jack asked half-smiling.

''I don't want anything, I only want you to return all safe and sound.'' Hannah had never asked Jack for anything. She even refused the ring Jack had bought for her on their first Valentine's. Hannah always held her self-respect high, She had set her boundaries and stayed in them. This was what made her different from others.

''All right, I'll come but I'll buy a present for you from my own choice. Till then take care of yourself and miss me.'' He could then see his eyes watering too but he tried to hide his tears and said ''Good Bye Hannah. I love you and always will.'' These were his last words. Hannah too waved him good bye by the time his car had arrived. Though his flight was set for afternoon but Jack had to go to his friend's place first where he had to collect his few clothes and books.

The car slowly started off. It's engine's noise made Hannah feel strange and completely lost. This time she didn't cry as she knew Jack had gone now.

Chapter Five

''Take a turn from the right lane, then two blocks away to Grand Magnifique.'' Jack instructed the driver.

''Sure, sir.''

After forty-five minutes Jack William reached at the entrance of Grand Paris Magnifique, which was Paris's most famous and top counted Fashion Industry, a place where World's renowned fashion designers, models and celebrities met. Jack had not been interested for showing up himself in the lime-light ever and neither did he like introducing himself to a large mob - he felt too uneasy - but this was his compulsion. He had to come here.

As he entered the hall he saw a woman dressed up strikingly. She was wearing a dazzling maxi-dress, probably designed by a top designer. She had applied smokey shade on her eyes which made them look sparkling. Keeping a straight posture she moved towards Jack and hugged him warmly.

''Hey Jack, how are you ? It's good to see you.'' The over-dressed lady said.

Jack was also happy to see her. He was on a month's vacation to have his time spent with her. He had missed her a lot. He firmly replied ''I am fine old lady, tell me about yourself. What have you been up-to lately ?''

''C'mon stop calling me old, I still look a hundred times better than you. I haven't lost my charms yet ! Even while being a mother of two I still feel like an 18 year old.'' She joked. Jack laughed at this statement and apologized with a wink.

''Okay, now the award-winning ceremony is about to begin. Wish me luck.'' She then made her way toward a large crowd that had been seated at the right side row in-front of the stage. Jack's number was fixed between two blondes which he didn't intend to but unfortunately his number came in-between them. Jack sat their quietly for two and a half hours, really bored to death. All he listened was stupid compliments thrown by different fashionistas - only flattering - he could now hardly wait for best fashion designer's award for which the lady who had met him was nominated.

Finally the time arrived and the speaker on the stage announced ''And the best Fashion Designer's Award goes to Mrs. Scarlett Johanson, who has proved to be a very prominent figure in our fashion Industry. Please give her a big round of applause.''

Scarlett met Johanson at a fashion show in New York and got married right after returning to Paris. Johanson was a rich feudal, with a bulky body and a fierce face. He was short-heightened and lacked all the good looks. Everybody knew that Scarlett had married him only because of his strong bank account.

A large number of people cheered up with brightness and clapped too excitedly as they saw Scarlett making her way toward the stage. Jack knew his sister would win this year's Award as-well because she'd been winning them since the last five years.

Scarlett went for the Award and there she made a nice but lengthy speech. Scarlett joined the world of Fashion and Arts when she realized she couldn't opt for any other occupation. She had twice failed in her Academic sessions. Therefore, Jolie decided to open up a boutique for her and had all the clothes designed by foreign designers which she had hired personally because Scarlett didn't know the sense of dressing or fashion. The workers instead did the main thing : bought clothes, matched them, designed them and sewed them - all by themselves - but the credit was to be owned by Scarlett. Jack never bothered to interfere in this matter, neither did he once ask about this cheating process. Though he strongly opposed It. He thought the same for his business too. He liked fair and just dealings and never allowed any money that was confirmed to be have been delivered by wrong means. He was a fair person unlike Scarlett.

''Congratulations Scarly !'' Jack congratulated her in a brightful tone, trying not to sound disappointed.

''Thank you Jack. You know how hard I've worked to achieve this position. Working day and night without a single brake is one hell of a hectic job. You might never realize how tiresome It is as in your occupation one only has to sit and pass on orders whereas in my case you have to do it all yourself. I wish dad had asked me to run the business.''

''Oh.... Yeah, you're right...'' He now didn't feel like taking the conversation further so he pardoned his sister for not attending the remaining event and went off to Scarlett's house.

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William's death caught the whole Eternal house on flames. Scarlett and Jolie both remained depressed for many days. A month had hardly passed of Jack's departure when this incident took place. William had gotten a heart-attack while he was in Spain settling his business work. His death caused a very bad break-down as now every responsibility was due on Jack. He was hardly twenty-two when he got the hold of EBMI, his family business. This was the cause of his delay which resulted in Hannah's being more upset.

Two months after William's death, Rashid fell seriously ill. This feared Hannah of losing him too. She prayed day and night for his father's early recovery. During the later and sensitive days of her father's death Hannah remained close to him as much as she could. As the days went by Rashid's situation grew more serious. He was on his last stage of cancer. He survived few breaths until one everning he died silently with only Hannah near him.

It was the most difficult time in Hannah's life or not to say this time as Jolie's behavior afterwards turned out to be a really difficult time in her life. It is true that Jolie had changed a lot since Jack moved away and William gone. Her attitude towards Hannah was the worst one could have ever thought of. She regarded her as a back-ward fellow and kept reminding her of all the good she'd done to her father. Hannah knew why she was acting in such a way. Ever since Jolie came to know about Hannah and Jack's affair, she searched for one excuse or other to teach Hannah a lesson. Jolie and Scarlett both started hating Hannah a lot and were finding a way out to get rid of her. After Rashid's death Jolie had just made up her mind that she would send Hannah back to Afghanistan before Jack's arrival.

Jolie on one Sunday lied to Hannah that an uncle of hers wanted to see her who had something to give her as a present. She even told Hannah about his uncle having her mother's wedding jewellery. Hannah without uttering a word passed off a nod in agreement. The next day she was to set off for Afghanistan. Jolie had given Hannah her word that she'd bring her back within a week. She gave Hannah a hundred dollar note and some clothes. Jolie had told Hannah about his uncle coming to pick her up once she arrived at the airport.

Hannah after a long and tiresome journey reached the Kabul Airport. There she saw nobody coming nearer to her and neither did she wait for anyone. Hannah knew no one would come.

She knew there was a no uncle. Her father had told Hannah this in her childhood that he had only one brother, Kamaal, who had died in a car accident long ago.

Chapter Six

''Hey, see who's there ! Uncle Jack.. '' shouted Brian enthusiastically. John too had woken up by then and hurried towards Jack.

''Hello boys '' Jack was very fond of kids and the other reason he often made his trip to Paris was to see Scarlett's sons. Brian and John both, who were twins, loved Jack's company. Both of them resembled their father Johanson a lot that is why both of them had broad and strong shoulders. They loved Jack because he played games with them and spent most of the time taking part in their childish activities.

''Thank Heavens you came uncle Jack. There's a lot to tell you. Hurrah !''

Jack then spent half of his month fooling around kids. When Scarlett and Johanson went out for dinner Jack and the kids stayed at home busy turning the whole house upside down. Things were moving so smooth that Jack had nearly forgotten about Amanda. He thought that he would sound too rude if he didn't ask her for a catch-up so he straight-away called Amanda. On the phone Amanda sounded as if she'd been waiting for his call. She agreed and cheered up through the phone.

Once again Jack smiled to himself for no reason...

Jack and Amanda met at sharp 5:pm on Palm Beach where they ordered a cup of coffee and sat on a table. Amanda looked awesome. She was wearing a light floral-printed shirt with a plain pink color shirt on top. She didn't wear glasses that day, she wore lenses instead. Her lashes were turned-up with a bit of mascara and green-liner on her eyes. She wore a red lipstick. It was the first time Jack had seen her so clearly though she had sat more nearer to him on the plane. Jack kept looking at her deep-set green eyes, observing how prettier she looked. When he saw Amanda taking notice of It he suddenly decided to wipe it off with a joke ''So did you take less than six hours for this touch-up, eh ?'' He raised a brow.

Amanda knew he was trying to cover up his awkwardness by saying that. ''Mr. Jack how often do you throw off such jokes in order to keep your status safe ?'' She raised two brows in return.

Jake laughed for almost five minutes before he collected himself and said ''When I face smart people like you taking notice of each and everything.'' Jack was a little surprised at Amanda's keenness. He was then even more attracted toward her. He never visualized she could make up so great a company. Amanda smiled at this remark and they talked on for three hours, again having no knowledge of the running clock. Amanda decided to skip on to more serious stuff and wanted to ask Jack about his personal life.

''Can I ask you something personal if you don't mind ?''

Jack already knew what she would ask. He patiently informed '' I don't have any girlfriend, I had somebody in my life whose name was Hannah. But she's not with me now.'' Amanda could see the sad shadow lurking in his eyes. ''We loved each other sincerely and I still love her more than anything.'' He couldn't speak more as he got emotional and feared he'd start crying like a child in-front of Amanda, which he didn't want.

Amanda was undoubtedly moved but after hard efforts she picked up enough pluck up to ask '' Where is she now ?''

''I don't know. My mother and sister tell me that she ran away with her paternal cousin who had come for her after her father passed away. But I don't believe it. I know she's not like that. My Hannah would never do such a thing. I know she still loves me. My Hannah honey boo. I'll wait for her. I know she'll return. She'll return someday

She'll return............

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''God ! You've got beautiful cups.'' The young man told the sex worker. He made love to her for hours and hours. Then came another customer's turn. This time an old one, giving hard shrieks to the poor prostitute. When his time finished another man came, same an old person. Then came another, then again another, then another one. This was how Hannah's every day passed. Every time a new customer, a new face and a new challenging time to make love, of course forcibly. Hannah never wanted this.

Hannah was brought into this prostitution work the time she arrived Kabul. After four hours of standing alone, a woman walked toward Hannah and asked her with whom had she come with. At first Hannah didn't reply because she didn't understand the language. The lady then pleasantly questioned her in English. Hannah inactively replied ''no one''. When asked for whom was she waiting Hannah's reply was the same. After a while she started sobbing. The woman who seemed very friendly worked as a security guard ; regardless of this she worked as a drug-dealer part time and dealt with prostitution stuff as-well. She told Hannah to go with her and called somebody on the phone speaking in her native language. She didn't resemble English people, she looked like an Asian. She told Hannah that her name was Kaima and she was from Nepal and that she was working at the airport because of the handsome salary they offered her. Hannah went with her to her house, a two-story house in the heart of the city, where she cleared a few things to her. Kaima told Hannah that she had called her sister Rani who would come after a few days and take her [ Hannah ] to Nepal with herself. Kaima told her that they owned a big bungalow there and had a farm-house too. She even convinced her by telling her that as soon she gets to Nepal, she'd be able to meet her nieces and nephews whom she surely will make friends with soon.

''You will definitely have an awesome time there and I'll also keep visiting you from time to time. My sister will take a good care of you. Time to get a family, babe ! '' Kaima had her influenced finally.

A few days later she took Hannah to the air-port where Rani was waiting for her. Hannah felt a little uneasy while watching a fancy-dressed, ugly-faced woman approaching toward her. Kaima kissed her, gave her many choclates and said ''Good Bye. May God bless you dear''. Hannah then held Rani's hand, the lady who was to take her off for Nepal.

At reaching Nepal, Rani took Hannah to a very unexpected place. Hannah kept on asking when would they reach her house, when would she meet her daughters and which place was that they were driving to. Rani told her to remain silent for sometime. She, after reaching the main city, directed Hannah to sit in a cab which was already present there. Hannah sat in the cab without questioning and was taken somewhere in Pokhara. The place was very dark and strange. There were many men waiting in a line outside a black gate and everywhere it read ( in english ) '' 800 rupee per hour.'' By this time Hannah understood where she'd been brought to. She was taken to an extremely dirty five-story building. The men asked Hannah to take off her clothes, she did as she was said so. She undressed herself while a memory sprang up in her mind. She remembered these very words she'd said to Jack when he had asked her out to make love '' You remember our deal ? No game of losing virginity.'' She had never considered Jack having seen her whole body, though he was her love and now the thought of showing her body to such strangers made her faint. She stood there naked with her eyes giving an impression of a deep ocean. She cried, not loudly ; but silently....

I hoped that he would love me,

And he has kissed my mouth,

But I am like a stricken bird

That cannot reach the south.

Chapter Seven

''Are you really kidding me young fella ? I mean how on Earth you haven't got committed yet ! Either you are making a fool out of me or you don't wish to share it with me. Okay .. No problem. Have it the way you like it.''

'No,no,no,no Scarly.. You're getting me wrong.'' Jack had to explain it more often now as nobody believed in what he said. ''Scarly, as I have said a thousand times before, I not at all feel tired in repeating it again'' though he was sick of it now '' that I am going to remain a bachelor for the rest of my life if I don't get the person I have always wished, hoped and dreamed of and you know that very well. So, please stop making it difficult for me each time you and mother come up with stupid questions.'' Jack again sounded heart-broken and hated his sister for it.

Scarlett was amazed at her brother's reaction. She never knew Jack could talk this way to her but neither was she aware how much such inquiries annoyed him. ''Mom was undoubtedly right ! You are a nuts ... I don't understand what the heck's wrong with you and your hormonal activities. You have wasted half of your life on a pretty beast who turned out to be selfish in the end. What's that worth for ?''

Jack who now blushed, bursted out on Scarlett as if he'd wanted to do that long ago ''What the fucking did you just mean by selfish ? You are calling her selfish whereas you are the one with selfish means. You married an ugly man who you must have hardly known before your marriage only to grab out the money out of his pockets and credit card, you ended up a drop-out of school because you never had those qualities which Hannah had acquired, you unfortunately didn't even prove a good mother by leaving your kids at home with some freaking new nannies while you go out searching for new scum-bags with a stronger bank-balance than Johanson and you run this designing business by your so-called hard-work. Well, I can see the hard-work which is done while you are absent for half of the day. Whom do you think you fool Scarly ? You think I never noticed the jealousy you had toward Hannah and the way you checked out on us from time to time. Poor Hannah never imagined what cruel face would turn out behind this Scarlett's innocent and pleasing face ! I know she didn't run, she didn't go away or even if she did so there must've been a strong reason or compulsion behind it. Things do not take place in all of a sudden. I've observed things very clearly but I don't feel like expressing them as I don't have any proof ... And as far as the waiting part is concerned, if I've wasted half of my life for a pretty beast I can waste the rest of my life waiting for that pretty beast as-well. This is now actually worth it.'' Jack finished off with a long breath. Jack had wanted to say this long ago but every time thought of letting go...

Scarlett was terribly hurt at Jack's words. She couldn't prove him wrong that's why she remained quiet. She spoke up quietly ''I'll be careful next time.''

''Thank You. Will be good for you.'' These words slipped off Jack's tongue almost un-intentionally but he couldn't help it other way. It always reminded him of Hannah which he didn't want to ; though he never wanted to forget her and never did he dare to try so.

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Amanda had now set a goal - a difficult and time consuming one. She made up her mind not long after when her and Jack's conversation ended. She had to do this, for the sake of Jack, for the sake of Hannah and for the sake of her feelings for Jack. She was going to find Hannah out at any cost.

''You'll never be able to find her, the world's too big with millions of people and the time always running out. It's impossible'' were Jack's words when Amanda told him about it. Jack knew that Amanda had decided it because she felt pity for him and was doing this is in sympathy. But she was doing it for a different reason. She loved Jack and wanted to see him happy. Amanda had fallen for Jack the day she met him on the plane. Though she never described it externally but deep inside she held a special place for Jack. She assured Jack by saying ''I promise I'll get you your girl soon.'' Jack looked away, half-smiling - half broken.

Amanda had asked him for Hannah's pictures and he gave her two of them. Amanda appreciated her beauty and called her a 'living princess'. She also inquired Jack about her exact place. As much as he'd learnt from his mother and sister she was in Afghanistan. This piece of information was enough and encouraging for Amanda as she'd been to Afghanistan many times, held shows over there and was still in touch with the United Afghani Media. Amanda was familiar with many places in Kabul, the capital of Afghanistan. After arriving there, she soon set out for Noor-abad village, where Hannah was born. The village was no more a village. It had changed a great deal since the past ten years. The area was developed, new schools, colleges and hospitals built. Amanda was heart-broken when the villagers said they didn't even know any person by the name ' Rashid '. However she didn't lose hope. She went back to the airport and had a brief meeting with the head of Afghani Airlines. The old man told him that she should better have a word with the security guards who were working there since many years. The man told her about the lady security guard, Kaima who dealt with the checking of all lady passengers. When Amanda asked where could she be found, the man instructed her towards a tiny room and Amanda quickly went in that direction. Amanda found Kaima very pleasant. When she showed Hannah's picture to her she trembled a bit and said that she didn't recognize the face in a shaky voice. Amanda at once observed the fearsome style she talked in and was now sure the security lady knew where Hannah was.

''I don't remember such face.'' Kaima murmured.

''You sure ?'' Amanda was trying to puzzle her some way.

''Yes.'' She remained stubborn on her statement.

''What about a 2000 dollars ? We'll make a deal without any third person involved. Take it or leave it.''

''I'll take you to her.''

''Good.''

Chapter Eight

''Hello mother, how are you ?'' Jack asked through the phone without having any feelings in real. He always blamed his mother for not taking care of Hannah. He used to tell this to himself 'Had mom and Scarlett taken care of Hannah she would have never been lost.'

''I'm just surviving on a lung dear. You tell what's up ?'' Jolie's left lung had expired due to excessive smoking. She now lived with one of her old neighbors who, too, was a widow. Jolie was nothing like she'd been before. She had lost all her womanhood grace and had gotten too old and rotten.

''Well, I'm busy here handling dad's business. After a month of easiness and calm I finally had to return here.''

Jolie kept silent for sometime and then quietly asked in a worried tone ''Son, have you found someone ?''

''No, mom.''

''Still ?''

'' Yeah, Still.''

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At returning back to the hotel room that she'd rented for herself, Amanda quietly sat on her chair, resting her head back. She was hell excited. She felt a huge responsibility lifted off from her shoulders ( though it hadn't been lifted yet ). She wanted to give this news to Jack but later changed her mind and decided to give him a surprise by taking Hannah to England and making her stand right in-front of him. The very thought made her heart ache. She could hardly wait more. All of it happened so easily that Amanda didn't feel exhausted in the least. She was busy picturing Hannah with Jack, holding each other's hands. She thought to herself '' Even GOD can not separate them now.''

The next day Amanda woke up early and was confused about the whole journey, on the other hand she'd been looking forward to it, too. Amanda dressed-up, carried her bag and went out for a cab. When she reached the airport she saw Kaima in an uncasual condition, she was dressed-up too over. However she told her that some men would come for her once she reaches the Nepalese airport. Amanda then handed over only 1000 dollar to her and promised to pay her the left half after getting her work done. They both shook hands and Amanda was off to Nepal.

When Amanda arrived Nepal, two men came to her and asked her if her name was Amanda. She replied in positive. They asked her to sit in the cab so she sat. Amanda had no idea where she was being taken to. The car drove for half an hour and then stopped at the same strange place where Hannah was brought. The man who was driving the car directed Amanda to get out of the car and enter the black gate which seemed 'hell gross' to her. The place was stinking badly. Amanda went into the building and saw a woman passing by. She took Hannah's name aloud again and again to make her understand. The lady took Amanda to the third-floor and pointed out at the last door. Amanda thanked her and went into that instructed direction. Amanda's heart was skipping many beats. She knocked at the door patiently and waited there for a few minutes but nobody opened the door. She was about to knock again when an enchanting figure appeared at the door. It was Hannah. By what she'd seen in the picture Hannah was much more beautiful than what the picture described. She turned-out to be a woman with many graceful looks. Her big brown eyes were shining in the day-light, her hair nicely wrapped up in a bun and she wore a lingerie which made her body curves look prominent. Although she looked prettier but the pale side of her skin was visible too. She seemed to have lost a good number of weight and dark circles, too, were highlighted under her eyes. Amanda considered Hannah superior to herself which made her feel bad.

Hannah asked her for whom she'd come. Amanda who for some time had grown conscious of herself suddenly thought about Jack. His tall handsome physique, his hot face-cut, charming eyes, pleasing smile and then she thought about herself. Their first meeting on the plane, the coffee they'd ordered and the way how Jack had stared at her without putting his gaze away- the indirect way he'd admired her beauty in - everything was going smooth until this girl, Hannah came in between them. She almost wept when she thought about Jack again. Amanda at that moment realized how much she'd liked Jack. She wanted herself to be with him again and it could only be possible if he knew nothing about Hannah. She called herself a fool for coming all the way up here to get somebody Jack had probably forgotten. What was the use of parting them now ? Hannah was a sex worker and she was used to it now. Amanda thought of the problems Jack would have to face if the media and other people found about Hannah's former profession. Jack was presently not in a situation to afford the risk of any scandals. She thought about everything. She even thought about the 'good' time she and Jack would spend together, how she'll be able to have influence on Jack again. How special it would feel to have him around every time. Amanda had to make a choice as it was getting late. She made up her mind. She wouldn't let Hannah win Jack over her.

Hannah thrice asked Amanda why she'd come there.

''I err .. I am looking for Elizabeth Dawn.'' She replied while gulping hard.

''Sorry, wrong place.'' Hannah shut the door.

Chapter Nine

Amanda arrived at England after a seven days of unworthy timetable. She went to see Jack. He asked her about Hannah as soon she stepped in his office.

''Sorry Jack, I couldn't find Hannah.'' Amanda tried hard to keep control on herself and sounded casual.

Jack, who was sure about it in the very beginning, wasn't too much disheartened. He knew he had lost her long ago. ''No problem. By the way thanks for everything Amanda. I don't know whether I'll be able to pay you back this way ever.''

Amanda got uncomfortable at his words so she changed the topic by bringing updates about new stuff.

Amanda was soon forgotten.

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They were sleeping with arms in arms. The weather was cloudy and fresh air allowed them for some romance. They had married a week before and felt loved each second. He was a sex freak and he wanted to make love every time....

''I love you my dearest.'' Amanda told him.

''I love you more.'' Ben said warmly.

Ben and Amanda were married after two years Amanda had come back from Afghanistan. She married him because she was sure Jack would've never accepted her in her life ; if even he did so he'd have never granted her Hannah's place. Ben was an awesome person who went terrific in bed. Amanda fell in love with him over the passage of time when they got to work together and she had a good chance of knowing him well. Ben, too, was happy with her. Before this he had been committed with Amanda's younger sister but that didn't last long. Ben never asked her why she'd left talking to Jack. He thought maybe it was because of his attitude. However, he didn't have enough courage to ask and it didn't even matter now as they were married. Amanda had stopped meeting Jack after a few months of her return in search of Hannah. She was fed up of the same topic Jack always discussed and that was surely about Hannah. To Jack, Amanda meant more than a special friend. Sometimes he had taken her seriously but then soon reminded himself that he had to remain loyal to Hannah till the end. When Amanda realized it she felt way more embarrassed than ever. She knew if she'd told Hannah the truth and brought her to Jack she'd have won his heart truely ; that is what she could have wished for only... Amanda regretted all her life what she'd done to Jack. She admitted it herself that she had committed a sin.

''You know I have done something very wrong in my life and I am sure God will never forgive me for that.'' Neither will Jack. Amanda didn't tell Ben anything regarding this matter. She didn't want to ruin her marriage by letting him know how insane she'd acted. Jack was Ben's best friend and if he came to know about it he would have obviously told Jack which she never wanted. Some times Amanda made up her mind that she would go to Jack herself and apologize but that very thought made her sick. How could she tell him such a wicked thing ? What would Jack take as an impression of hers.? Amanda now couldn't find any way.

''What are you talking about, honey ?'' Ben asked Amanda half-puzzled.

''Nothing. Some words are better left unsaid.''

Chapter Ten

Jack turned fifty on his fiftieth birthday. He had received birthday wishes from half of the city's population. He, at the age of fifty, still didn't appear too old. He exercised daily that was the reason he remained fit. Everything in his life was done, he managed his father's business rightly and now had given it's hold to his nephews, his debts were all cleared, his goals achieved except one thing : The person whom he had missed the most and still missed. It was after many many years that he sat on his sofa, reading the birthday wishes of his dearest ones that he started weeping slowly, the thing he'd done his entire life. His emotions were too sorrow, he couldn't workout the extent of his feelings himself. He felt lost... he felt incomplete...

Scarlett was happy with her second husband Paul. She took divorce from Johanson because she considered Paul a hundred times richer than him. Paul owned half of the Paris's Fashion Industry and was further planning to own much more. He was 35 years old and Scarlett 55. This was still not shocking as every soul knew Scarlett had married him because of his money and fame. She knew that marrying Paul would spare her another ten years in the Fashion Industry, though she was very old to have continued with her 'designing stuff' but she wanted to exploit every opportunity. The chances were least for her of surviving those very ten years...

Jolie was on her death-bed, half-paralysed. She never realized her mistake or if at times she regretted what she'd done to Hannah she only satisfied herself by saying 'That was what God himself wanted.' She never figured out the pain her son had to suffer all his life, she rather called him a 'psycho with no feelings'. However, her time was short and she only spent it by making herself feel good. Her breakfast, lunch and dinner all consisted of one thing : medicines. She was only counting her days.....

On this day, Jack's birthday, he received a parcel. When he opened it he found a letter in it which read :

'' Star's Apartment, 3rd floor. Pokhara, Nepal.

Hannah's address.

Forgive me Jack.''

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Jack knocked at the door. A voice asked ''Who is it ?''

Jack wasn't in a condition to speak up and after hearing Hannah's voice he felt like drowning in a deep sea. Hannah opened the door and asked Jack, whose head was lowered, whom he'd come for. Jack's sobs were continuously dropping down until he looked up and said ''I am searching for my Hannah honey boo.'' Hannah who had opened her mouth in an awe quietly sat down on the floor with her hands covering her face. Hannah was emotionless, she couldn't speak. After all these years she had no hope of seeing Jack again though every night she thought of him lying close to her, putting arms around her and telling her how much he loved her.. but that was just a thought which never died, that thought came to her surviving and living in its form ; the same thought was what Jack had had all these years. Both of them were living their moments by the same thought , the same hope that the other lost-lover would come back someday. Her heart was crying out loud. Jack, who didn't even have any authority over himself that moment, also sat on the floor touching Hannah's face while informing ''You don't have to do that anymore.'' Hannah, then leaned towards Jack and placed her head on his chest. They only cried....

After a while, Jack warned her with cracky and sad voice by saying ''I will not let you run away this time.''

Jack gently placed a kiss on Hannah's hands which made both of them feel loved, though it came surprisingly...''Will you be mine forever ?'' Whispered Hannah. She was 45 years old but her beauty seemed to have vanished nowhere. Her light pale brown eyes were shining as-always, though she'd gotten some wrinkles but her skin remained fresh and clear. She had gained a little weight and was wearing a short strapless dress, which provided the proof of her still working as a prostitute. But she didn't have to do it now. She had her Jack back..... (though too late)

''Yes, forever - It's a promise.''

There were no more words said, no expressions made and no feelings hurt.

For though I know he loves me,

To-night my heart is sad;

His kiss was not so wonderful

As all the dreams I had.

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Rosendorn
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Hello.

I'm going to start with the basics: how to use grammar.

Brackets are very infrequently used in fiction writing, primarily because they are used for asides that aren't completely relevant to the plot. The thing about descriptions such as how somebody's breathing or who somebody is: those are important, relevant things to writing. You'll want to attach them to a narrator and generally make them stand out in the writing.

Description is a tricky thing, and this article helps you work in descriptions more easily in your writing. You'll want to use a fair chunk of it, simply because that's what lets people see the narrator, the setting, and generally understand what's going on. You simply won't get the same richness sticking everything in brackets.

Next up, dialogue! When it comes to dialogue punctuation, you really shouldn't have spaces between the quotation marks and what they're surrounding. So your prologue would look like:

One... Two... Three ...

(breathing slowly)

Four... Five... Six...

"You can't find me Hannah."

"And what if I did?" Shouted Hannah from the corner end of Eternal Cottage's backyard.

"Then I'll marry you."

"Promise me?" asked Hannah cautiously.

"I promise."


Also, notice how the quotes look a little different? On most computers you can just click the shift key along with the quotation marks button and get double quotes. This is a better idea than pressing the single quote button twice.

This article goes a little more on dialogue punctuation. If you want some tips on dialogue itself, check out this article!

You have a lot of dialogue in here; probably a bit too much! The biggest issue off the bat is the dialogue is known as "talking heads". This article describes talking heads as a conversation that goes back and forth without any real description around it. If you follow that article's process, you can really improve your writing a lot with just a few simple additions.

Overall, this is an admirable effort and if you just polish up the grammar, dialogue, and description,you'll be well on your way to something amazing.

Good luck writing! Hope to see you around YWS. Let me know if you need anything!

~Rosey

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Evalynne
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Sorry about the end of that last review; I accidentally pressed post before I was done, because I am very stupid and I am also a complete and utter imbecile. Sorry.

Also, in dialogue, you need to have comma before someone says something unless there is an action directly before, full stop if there is an action. On the other hand, at the end, if there is a tag, it is a comma, if an action a full stop. For the end part, exclamation and question marks would be accepted for both instances.

Examples:

Sarah said angrily, "Shut up, Daniel!"

Sarah was fuming. "Shut up, Daniel!"

"Shut up, Daniel!" Sarah said.

"Shut up, Daniel!" Sarah stamped her foot in anger.



See what I mean?



Yeah, so, basically, the review is mostly over, but I would suggest breaking it up into smaller parts corresponding to each chapter, as having a very long … Thing of text can really put readers off, therefore you will not get as many reviews, and will not improve as much as you could.


I think that’s the review pretty much done, so please take my points into accounts, and have a nice day!

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Evalynne
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Hi! It's me, here to do a review on this piece of work! Hopefully you won't find this to be too harsh, although, quite frankly, there is rather a lot that could be ... Improved upon.

Wow, that does sound harsh, doesn't it? I'm very bad for saying things in a harsh way; it's one of my fatal flaws, unfortunately, alongside my narcissism and my rambling, which I do believe I am doing right now, which basically just proves my point. (Shut up, Ev, just get on with the review!)

That was probably what you are thinking, and I apologise for my rambling. As I said before, it is one of my fatal flaws, and sometimes I really just can't help it and it annoys people and is so annoying, I know, but okay, now onto the review! (Breathes sigh of relief.)

Okay, enough with the rambling, I've gotta do this. Get into the right state of mind ... Okay, here we go!

Aargh! Grammar in dialogue! Aargh! (Sorry, bad grammar in dialogue is, like, my number one pet peeve, apart from other people rambling. Which, now that I think about it, is quite weird, because I do that all the time. Did I spell weird right? 'Weird' or 'wierd'?) Okay, sorry, I'll get on with the review now!

:)


Okay, so, your grammar in your dialogue is rather ... Off. I should probably just point out the parts where it's incorrect in your work, but I honestly think that if you look over it yourself after I've told you the rules, you'll be able to fix it.

In dialogue, you must always, always put the punctuation inside the speech marks. For example it wouldn't be: "shut up"! Sarah said. It would be: "Shut up!" Sarah said. (Alternatively, you could replace said with something more imaginative, but that's really irrelevant right now, isn't it?)

Now, imagine Sarah (yes, the same Sarah, because I have grown attached to this Sarah) was addressing someone in this. It wouldn't be: "Shut up Daniel!" Sarah said. It would be: "Shut up, Daniel!" Sarah said. (Again, you could replace 'said' with something else. I'm rambling again.)

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Theodorable
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Well, I'm a bit confused. I think this is a poem right now. If it needs to be moved, I believe that you can fix that. If it's only a piece of the puzzle, then it's an intriguing start. The stanza conveys emotion very well, even though it is only four lines. The rhythm and rhyme are great. No errors that I can see.

Well, one can always figure out the real consequences following a long journey of sth, the same goes here. These four lines have been taken from somewhere after finishing the whole of my (short) novel, myself. This is what creates the utmost joy while reading the initial paragraphs ( though nothing so melodic has been mentioned in all of the story itself ) but the ending theme shall always provide the reader with the lost or required emotions, being re-filled before closing the last pages of any book.
And thank you for some keen observation.



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