Erb

Very nice! But some of your choices of wording I'm questionable about. "you can’t feel" i was hoping for a better word besides "feel" actually. Also the parts where you ...

One word, WOW. That was incredible! I don't think there's a single part of that i didn't enjoy. The title was but mediocre though. It fits with your story, but ...

I really liked your plot shifts, from the red wine and gripping your bedpost right back to the office chair. Kind if gives the reader a sense of whats inside ...

The first of this poem had me smiling! Very good work! I found towards the ending you kind of dragged it on a lot more,(your single lines) but besides that ...

This piece was very descriptive, which is great! But at the end, i kind of had a feeling of "What.. that's it!?". Also, you might want to try to find ...

Ahh.. have you ever heard of the term "comma splicing"? Try to avoid the overuse of commas my friend. I also found myself... bored with this piece. Most of what ...

I really liked the title of this, definitely caught my attention! But you should make your poetry a little more... mysterious. and toward the drier road (on the sign was ...

Overall, it was great! But a lot of grammar mistakes! Consider looking it over, do you use Microsoft word? On another note, I know pretty much nothing about the twilight ...

Pieces such as this go to show that children should not be neglected as "unable" compared to adults. If you're truly ten years old, your truly talented. I have a ...

This line didn't really appeal to me. There is love within my chest for you. Also, the entire time I read this it left me wondering, who in the world ...

I liked it a lot, noticed that there has been many edits to it considering previous reviews.. id criticize the same things to be honest. Its great now, only thing ...

For those lost souls, Death is hardest on the forgotten . I would use a period here instead of a comma For those lost souls, Time of pain, and floods ...