ErBear

THIS IS AN AMAZING STORY! Sorry to go all 'caps' on you, but seriously ! That was one of the most emotionally sturring pieces I've ever read on this site! ...

Wow! You have a smooth way of reminded me of waves, almost! My suggestion would be to break up your writing into a couple stories.. most people don't like to ...

Post part 2 already! :) Seriously...tell me when you do! I love this story! Nothing to really change...except for a few convention errors. Here's a tip- take some time to ...

curtainsaround by shoulders, it's fate still undecided. Curtains around....... that last bit makes no sense- I would reword it :) seeing my short haired sister.... blond headed... short-haired, blond-

This is an exquisite story! I was taken immediately by your writing style- in this story, you don't give away too much detail but you draw the reader's attention to ...

Hey! That is one fantastic story! Constructive criticism: I realize that this is a short story, but if you could add a little bit more detail about her home situation ...

Vaughn let out a yawn and laid back, placing his hands behind his head. "You think you can make the food this time?" He asked Mayuko. It should be, "...you ...

ADRIAN: So you were planning to make more weaponry for the scavengers. This should be a ? not a . Other than that, no things needed to fix. Wow Vast! ...

Hey Vast-izzle! Sorry I haven't reviewed sooner- I finally got around to it!! MAN: What do you want, Adrian? ADRIAN: Hi, Louie. Where's Calvin? I know that the man is ...

It was Marsday , the 21st of Laguna , and it was a day everyone in Castle Takenight would never forget as today was a very special day. Tomorrow began ...

The streets are filled with children, playing their games , awaiting the school bells of fall. Summer ' s humid air fills my breaths fills my breaths? would it be ...

When I woke up with the sunrise, I could tell that today was going to be different. I could tell because mother-mine was hardly speaking and father-mine was avoiding me. ...

Romantic fiction? Hmm....... I'm just wondering, does this story belong in romantic fiction? Anyway, great story! I loved the suspense of your ending, it hooks the reader and makes them ...

Nineteen, that’s how old Abby would be if she was still here, he thought. Looks like she swerved to miss something … flipped the rig three times. Was their conclusion ...

He blamed the whether weather :D hey BBB! Wow, beasty story! i love how you were able to recipracate the cozy feeling of an afternoon fishing with Grandpa. You made ...