Emotastic_Writer

You should mix it up, make it jazz and flow better. The word now is used too much and makes it wayy to repetitive. Maybe try to use a different ...

I think it's great. Some may say it needs editing but i like it the way it is. Only maybe you should change a few words, the flow is a ...

I'm not the heavy metal type but my friend is in a heavy metal band. I am getting to like it. I think that the change from calm to roar ...

'She goes all over the ice twirling and jumping. She feels like she’s flying, Flying away from everything.' That is a good part, it has a good description and it ...

The beginning paragraph is good. It helps me visualize something going awfully wrong. The second paragraph is good, it shows desperation and confusion. It shows in reality what many people ...

I think that the way you word it is a bit confusing and it threw me off but the basic gist is good. You were slow at first but towards ...