EmilyofREL

Hey you! I know i read this before, but just wanted to read it again. All the nitpicks have been taken care of, so I'll leave you alone. Oh and ...

My jaw's on the floor. I've only read one other poem from the point of view of a disease. That was one was more positive, but this one. Wow! What ...

This is so sad...But I'm confused. Did they hit each other? why was he on his way to the airport? Did I miss something? This has a lot of potential, ...

Looks like everyone else took care of the rest, but I'd just like to add in my two cents. I'm anxious to know more about both of them, and how ...

I'm gonna be mean first, and then I'll tell you what I liked. The biggest thing I noticed is you're doing a lot of "telling" when you should be "showing". ...

Hey there Sarah! I'm not a grammar person, so I'm not gonna nitpick. Looks like most of your first editors got it anyways. Good start so far and leaves the ...

Sad and descriptive. Manda mentioned it's lack of clarity, but I think the vagueness added to the emotion. It doesn't really matter who this man is, or how she got ...

Goodness this is adorable. This sort of modern South African/English society is interesting to me. I've read a few books with it and loved them. I'm anxious to know what ...

Hey Rissa. So,I like it so far. But I agree with the above poster. You describe everyone's looks in the same way. We don't need a black and white description ...

Wow. Great start. I like how you already try in the music thing by comparing the gum chewing to a symphony...there was another music mention in there...Sorry I don't remember ...

i agree. Interesting start but watch the typos. I like the idea of the "Children aged beyond their years". Maybe explain this more. What does their hair look like in ...