EmilyofREL

Sooo I already gave my feedback, but I need the points so I'm gonna review here too. "I could have screamed—it bubbled up at the back of my throat as ...

Interesting. I really like the idea of this but I am DYING for more intensity and description throughout. I feel like I'm listening to someone tell me about what he ...

Short, sweet, and surprising. I really like this. At first you think the wife is just fine, then you suspect she might be sick, then finally at the end you ...

The main thing standing out to me in the first few paragraphs is you do a lot of telling and not a lot of showing. WHY is the rainy day ...

This makes me laugh and cringe at the same time. I'm not sure what I was expecting, but this is snappy and sarcastic. This might be the shortest piece I've ...

Okay so for the most part I love this, and I'm not even a big poetry person. Great word choice, nice pacing, and interesting structure. Certainly captures that half-awake/half-asleep, sick, ...

I agree with Jager on pretty much everything but the title. I like the title. But I agree this was bogged down by big words and extra description. I want ...

For the most part this is amazing! I was going to point out the capitalization of lord, but I see you already responded to that. Personally, I'd capitalize Lord. It ...

Interesting idea, but I'm a little confused about the setting, the Totalitarian thing, and why the horse is talking. You need to make the setting more clear. I'm assuming this ...

For the most part I really like this. The imagery is beautiful, unique, and crystal-clear. You really made me feel like I was sitting right there on the water with ...

I love this. I read the more expanded part of this that you sent me a while back, but this is just as great. I don't remember excatly how you ...

Hilarious...and making me wish more and more I had a boyfriend I could do this with. My favorite part was this line here "Boyfriend Gatorade Fights are a milestone of ...

I agree with everyone else, this is beautiful. The power of food is not ordinary and you showed that wonderfully. The imagery is so vivid and beautiful. And the careful ...

I liked this. I think the line everyone said didn't make sense "poem as lovely as a tree", could be changed to A poem "As lovely as a tree," (you ...

I've never had what people would call a conventional strong faith. I haven't been to church in years because my parents speak "Christianese" and my mom has been critized many ...