Emerson

Look I'm reading again! oooh I love emotions and random guys injecting stuff into jon.... ^_^ I have nothing else to say really...not actually a critique. Ummm good job? Yes!

1. Don't post in caps. Ever. 2. Why not write your own? 3. This should...probably not go here. 'lyrical poetry' is not 'lyrics' for music. But umm... I can't move ...

Moved to other. This is kind of verseless prose, not fiction, but not poetry either. It's okay that you couldn't find where to put it ^_^ I wasn't entirely sure, ...

lol, what are they actually about?

Ha ha, he has an amazing life, despite his homosexuality. It's not like he raped any of the men, wouldn't that be worse? And really, at the time, he wasn't ...

2 for Hitchhiker! The Historian by Elizabeth Kostova.

lol you guys are digging up my not-so-good poetry.. Oh well, thanks for the words anyways :-D

lol, Stupidiot, this is a Fanfiction of a story written by another member, incandescence. His story is called Chionophobia, and a lot of this would probably make a LOT more ...

Like Miya said, you should probably space your paragraphs out. You might want to look at the 'before you post' thread for suggestions on things like that.

I haven't really read it, but since people are suggesting a move, and Foreseer says fantasy... Moved to the Fantasy Section

Ariel knows what is going on! oooh. I love the Jon/Kyle love tension. More teasing then Ch.

Flash backs are cute ^.^ *informs you she read this one* I should try telling someone I love them, and ask them not to respond. We'll see how that goes.

Hee. I think I'll leave it as is, simply because it is creating room for interpretation, and I always like confusing people. But thank you for the comments. The last ...

Thanks Tangerine! I have a question though. The second stanza feels sort of uneven, jerky, disjointed. Not so sure why, but I think it has to do with the way ...

I....don't think this is a poem. And 'thysely' isn't a word. You repeated "thou shalt not", ended each sentence with, '...' and it made no sense, and, yeah, like I ...