Emerson

I think it's cute, and I certainly could never writing in iambic pentameter. >_< A few lines didn't really... sound right: But be I wise to bring her seed. I'm ...

This seemed real... erratic? I'm not sure that is the word I am looking for. I loved the comparison to the Berlin Wall, but I suppose that is the Krautophile ...

Don't forget to punctuate! It's real important to poetry. ^_^ Poetry & Punctuation . This was cute, but it was written overly simple, and it did a whole lot of ...

Some quick notes on random things: please punctuate [ Poetry & Punctuation ] and capitalize properly, including the pronoun I. To the poem: it has a sort-of rhyme scheme, but ...

[s]But at least,[/s] for now at least, I’m doing something. This is hopeful, it fits nicely. I think the scene with her friends could have been written better, and with ...

It annoys me that you neglect to mention Jon closing the front door. Jon glanced at the staircase, certain someone--or something--would be standing there, watching...waiting. I think you are missing ...

Oh. You say it is horrible and yet I loved it! [pardoning capitalization and punctuation follies] That was... beyond brilliant/beautiful. The imagery was wonderful, and "(am I killing you with ...

"No duh , " Julie mumbled, scrambling around, trying to find a flashlight or lighter. "And by the way, I wasn't worried." Pearl is my very best friend, but she ...

I liked the idea, but I think I would like it more if I could get some emotion from the meaning of light and dark, and if there was more ...

What really bothers me is the bold letters and the spaces. To me, an acrostic should be written without putting so much stress, like you did, on the first letter. ...

I enjoyed this ^_^ I think I'll leave what others have said, because I can't find much to pick on. Though [and I hate to directly disagree with someone] I ...

I think I liked part one more. I also liked the first line, but I'm trying to understand it along with the rest of the poem, and with part one. ...

Be sure to capitalize the pronoun "I". This has a few problems: 1. You do a lot of telling, and practically no showing. 2. Navel-gazing 3. What is the difference ...

I'm really glad you're writing parts to this, because It was too short! I wanted more. I think I've understood this fairly well. is the only thing I think I ...

Punctuate, please please please. Poetry & Punctuation . This was way too abstract for me to enjoy. What are you talking about? I have no clue. You're just describe some ...