Emerson

Yay for French. ^_^ If you're wanting it to be plural, Master of Shadows, it will have to be Maitre des ombres, otherwise d'ombre is singular. Master of shadow. I'm ...

I'm not sure I like it, because imagining someones runny noise nastiness dribbling down their face is gross... XD ew. It also isn't how I imagine autumn. But that's all ...

I'm not really sure what to say about this. You wrote about a fire? What is there behind this, where is the meaning? I can't really get at it. Your ...

This is... hm. It's too abstract. You're working with emotions, or something. People, and what they are doing, and where they are going. I can really only guess because it ...

Don't forget to capitalize the pronoun I. I'm not entirely sure what this is about, or what emotion you are trying to convey/make me feel, so it's hard for me ...

This is interesting. I really like it, but I want to push it into form, with proper line breaks, punctuation, style, etc. Currently it's just in weird paragraphs with strange ...

The first stanza was beautiful with the imagery of the little girls. I don't like it much though because you mix moon, and sunshine, so I can't really tell which ...

I would say you should cut the first stanza all together. It's all telling, and the rest of the poem is better in comparison. As to the rest of the ...

Light, blinding, surrounded him Why not say "blinding light"? at the feel of the wind beneath his wings once more. This bothers me because I feel like something should follow ...

Heh, Kitty already got to the punctuation. All the commas don't really work in it, try to think of how you would read it and what kind of punctuation would ...

The last two lines didn't do as much for me as the rest of the poem. Everything is so good and powerful, but then that plea seems weak in comparison ...

No one watches as your life flutters by but the murderer, Who grants you no time before he brings down his dagger into my side, Your tense change here (from ...

I liked it! The only thing I could suggest you do is make it stronger. Make your words and imagery more vivid, express the cold and heat in ways that ...

It's... cute. But it isn't really poetry. This might be lyrics, but poetry [to me, and to others I am sure] has more behind it than words. It has a ...

Hmmm. Honestly, I'm not sure what I think. But I'll try to make sense of it for you. ^^; The emotions weren't described well enough. You had good metaphors, but ...