Emerson

I'm not a big fan of "free form" because everyone I have seen (mostly) try to write it on here uses "free form" as an excuse to ignore basic rules ...

I hate to ruin it for you, but this isn't a good poem. It's too much you . A poem should bring something for the reader. I believe I said ...

I think the biggest problem with this poem is that, even though the title says what the poem is about... I can't tell what this poem is about. I appraise ...

I'm just going to hack it as I feel. ^_^ I'm dancing with the Reaper [comma] feet dragging across the floor as he spins me round and round. The crowds ...

First off, welcome to YWS! If you have any questions or need help feel free to find me. :) I liked everyone but the ending. It was too rainbow-and-puppy-dogs-and-fluffy-white-clouds for ...

This is too short to be a poem... Not to say that poetry can't be short; but I also have to be able to understand it. I kind of get ...

his stone heart beating like a low [s]dum[/s] drum , and jumped. That is a really good line! But I suggest you post more if you want a real critique; ...

This is one of those poems that clutches me deep in the chest and holds me and doesn't let me slip out until at last... I'm done reading, and I ...

Please do not argue with people who are giving critiques. If they are giving up their time to help you improve your writing, you should appreciate them, not yell at ...

I liked this a lot... but I think you let it drag on far to long. My suggestion is end it at S4. The last line in that is really, ...

Like snoink said, the line breaks are a little wild. I actually think this would be really good if you fixed the line breaks, got rid of the repetition (I ...

This is really good, pengu... The only thing I didn't like was the last line. I think you shoudl contain it to its style, and perhaps let I am human ...

Because even if you are drowning in joy, You are still drowning. This was the best part of the whole poem. If I was allowed, I would steal it and ...

Colly has stolen the words from my mouth... Or perhaps I just don't like depressing poetry? I take that back! The Garden of Love by William Blake I went to ...

I like it! I'm glad it was published! It is very simple; there is nothing under its skin. But I don't think it needs to be any better than that. ...