Emerson

He pulled up the boy’s chart. His name was Damon. OMFG, its Damon again! just to make sure it was a figment of his imagination. should it be "wasn't"? “I—“ ...

You should space out your paragraphs (Which I would have done for you but it is a little confusing where the spaces would go, the way it is written...) and ...

If it had punctuation, I would come back and read it. Right now, its somewhat too hard to understand without the punctuation in certain areas. tears fears and insecurities reached ...

It started out with a nice flow then sort of tapered off and got bulky and wordy. extremely happy, or unbearably sad. You're a writer, yeah? You can find better ...

Grammar wise, etc. my only big complaint is you could have used more punctuation. I'm not exactly sure what to say. We get a lot of poems here about teenage ...

Trying your hand at poetry again, I see? Some verses I had to reread to pick up on what was being said (Which is not your fault, but mine!) and ...

I couldn't catch the whole meaning of the poem, which tends to happen when I'm reading something by you...but I could catch, or at least I hope I did, the ...

It was...interesting I suppose? Lacked the capitalization of "I" I think it had some spelling errors, had no general form and was very... unusual. The only part of the poem ...

I liked this :-D keep your headache in the bottle, I really like this line here. The ending was what made it best for me, it was nice and well ...

Deader than I could ever be I don't think deader is a word. More dead? Thou no crime has been committed Bad word usage... The word should be "Though" Thou ...

By the way, my name’s Johanna Pearl. I’d love to tell you that I’m tall, with strawberry-blond hair and a body that Paris Hilton would envy. Don't write this like ...

New perspectives are always interesting to look at! Though I do have complaints. I assume that the repetition of lines was either to show insanity or disorder? I figure disorder, ...

I figured I'd read this in connection to Ch. wow. Blew me away. The metaphor of a magician and how we loose things in life really gripped me. This poem ...

So, was he bleeding with the cuts (and when had it happened?) or were these older wounds? I assume he had gone to their bedroom, cut, and then came out? ...

I have two notes on general posting. 1. Don't include polls in your poetry/fiction threads, people are going to tell you there opinions through posting, not through polls. 2. I ...