Emerson

I'm not entirely sure what to think of this poem even though I somewhat like what you've done in certain places. The beginning of it, the first three stanzas, is ...

but perhaps, as if they were nothing more than worthless dirt, They have scattered on the wind of my life. This is a great simile, but I think you're saying ...

I like the meaning behind this poem because it's something I can easily relate to, but I didn't catch on to the meaning until you yourself had said it was ...

Hello! So since I'm used to old, horror Jig (who I love A LOT) I expect something to jump out of somewhere and mystically tear these kids to shreds. Please ...

Hey there! I really love the idea/them behind this poem, coming out of your shell and darkness, falling in love, and finding hope in life through it. Of course I'd ...

I directly went to the motionless person lying on the bed. This is a very awkward sentence mostly because of "directly". This story has a good plot to it but ...

I just skimmed Andy's review, but his bits on characterization are spot on. A sticky red pool with a gut-wrenching metallic scent. Also known as a puddle of blood. Blood ...

Hey there Cookie! This is a really cute story! I love the conflict between what the character felt during the kiss and the fact that she knows the emotions are ...

I like the hopefulness that this story ends with. Having some very, very good friends going through eating disorders myself, it's always nice to think that there will be happy ...

ooo First review is mine. :D If they were in her bedroom, she would have been scared. But since they were in some mysterious place, she only had one thought ...

This is a great beginning to a story and I'm glad the second part's up, cuz I'm going to run off and read it right away. :) Like I said, ...

I think this is a real cute idea for a story! A spider for a pet is great. I'm curious how this is based on a greek myth, though, since ...

It's hard for me to not simply echo the previous reviews, then run away having said scant else. But I'll do my best to add more! Both were correct in ...

Hey there! So I agree a lot with what Canislupis said. You have a great base for a plot/story here, but you're missing a few important pieces, mainly characterization. Try ...

Time and time again I feel sick, like there is not enough blood going into my brain. My heart sometimes feel like stone. I love the imagery! This is wonderful. ...