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Re: Deleted
This poem was very beautiful! I love how it illustrates this topic. The poem itself is very non-conformist in your use of language and illustration. I love how your last ...
Oct 11, 2009 -
Re: I didn't know her well.
Wow that was strong! I am in love with this story! I have had a somewhat similar experience... But anyways, here are my critiques. There are a few spelling errors ...
Oct 11, 2009 -
Re: Anubis
Oh my goodness, that was amazing! It was so descriptive and almost mysterious, and lovely! Your writing style is very unique and almost intoxicating! You wrap your reader in the ...
Aug 24, 2009 -
Re: I Need You To Write. - 1. Part 1.
Overall i thought this piece was very interesting. I love how the first line is so dramatic. It really draws you in. One thing i wasn't to crazy about was ...
Jun 12, 2009 -
Re: Life and Death
Wow. This piece was deep and thoughtful and overall spectacular. I cannot see no flaw here. Your passion for writing is shown in this piece ten fold. If you are ...
May 30, 2009 -
Re: I Lost You
This piece seemed... a bit akward, though i am not sure those are the right words. It needed more. I felt as though you were building up to the tension ...
May 30, 2009 -
Re: Lost in the Shadows
OMG!!!!!! This story is amazing! I lovethe way you illustrate Dania's world. Thee drama really sets in as you read. Your use of vocabulary also helps with the amazing picture ...
May 30, 2009 -
Re: into the cracks of the earth
I thought this poem was very deep. I thought it needed a bit more. I felt that it stopped short and could go a bit deeper. Also, parentheses in a ...
May 30, 2009