EloquentDragon

I'll be your faithful reviewer for today. First off, I have no idea what any of this is about. You should put the "this is to show people blah blah" ...

Neither is disapparate. Bwah ha ha ha. I'm sorry, I read this mostly like a comedy for some reason. Is this what your mind really goes through? If so, I'm ...

So it seems you have emerged from your cave of poetry, welcome to the domain. Mwuh ha ha ha. Actually, this was still mostly poetry. Or at least I found ...

Well, hello there. Welcome to YWS. I am going to be brief here, but I hope that I can help. First off, I must say, that this is some interesting, ...

Whoah. First of all. I think you need, at least, a 16+ rating on this guy. Maybe not, but my mind went somewhere very quickly. (It's the imagery, mind you) ...

ED here to review. I was going to say that the reason why we all find this so well, to be frank, boring, is because nothing happens in it. I ...

ED here to review. So, you've got an interesting premise here. Unlike Fire, I would say that this works well as a stand alone piece. By no means is this ...

Well, hello there. I'm here to review. Is this to your NaNo? Just wondering. First off, please, please, please, please space out your paragraphs. This is one huge block of ...

ED here to review, welcome to YWS! Nitpicks first. Grayson trudged through the halls of St. Agatha's, arms drawn up to her chest in a nervous shield. She slides through ...

O_o ...okay.... Well, that was interesting. Welcomes to YWS, btw. ;) I see what you were trying to do here. Create a fragmented and vague voice. Done right, such can ...

Salutatio! You know, if I didn't spend so much time on Spanish, I would take Latin. Ah well, est ut est. The way you break up the lines here doesn't ...

Welllllll, hello there. I found that this has a potential for excellence, but I think it falls a little short of that potential. So here are the few, brief things ...

ED here to review. Welcome to YWS, by the way. I noticed that you've been doing a couple of reviews here and there and thought you deserved a fair turn. ...

ED here to review. Without further ado: Chapter 2Doom loiters. Eh... what? Make sure you check your line spacing there. I had to read this a couple of times before ...

First of all, that was short! Okay then. It is a pleasure to burn; To just waste away. This is my favorite line, it grabbed my attention. Good job! I ...