Elizabeth

I liked this but there was one little thing that annoyed me and threw off how I read it: They’ve stained my fingers frostbitten Passion ... What? I don't know ...

HAHA I BET THAT GUY FELT SO EMBARASSED! *laughs* I liked it, actually, usually I think that rhyming poems are terrible but this... oh my goodness this was hilarious... "Leave;be ...

I love the poem and I love your signature... very nice... "You tell your story without luck She thinks you're but a lying drunk" That didn't reallyseem to rhyme by ...

As lovely as I am xanthan's twin (Chinese birthday equals hers... lalal) I aggree with the sentence thing... I liked all the imagery. I'm all into this hope thing too, ...

Crash and bash sound weird in teh same line... but it gives an image. But using crash twice in the stanza seemed... repetitive! Slosh could be foam I suppose. As ...

All these sea terms and mystical creatures and it's so lovely. (though you could have used mermaids an undines and such :P) I especially like the part about the sirens ...

This is pretty damn scary. It would have had a better effect without all the rhyming. The word Baby annoys me... I like the entire plotline but not the words... ...

Xanthan: come on girl, live with it! FREEDOM OF POST!!! :P I liked this, cute though... Weird Al is humerous, and would enjoy this poem... if I thought he had ...

How far is the guy from the burning building? He seems to be ontop of the gargoyle and then at the building. (critique as I go along) There is no ...

I really liked the.... meaning in it... but ... everything else sort of bothered me, even with the edits... No offense, it's proobably my mood but I liked it... my ...

I never had a chance to entirely read it... but from what I've read and heard, it is just as depressing as anything I ever read.... Although I'm just getting ...

Yeah I think I read this before but didn't comment.... Derange should be deranged But then I see you cute And I put on my best suit And give a ...

Gods should be God. my sould my flesh and blood should be my soul, my flesh, and blood But you've left me here in the mud can just be But ...

It was.... age expected. That is usually one of the things I look for.... well, tis not age expected, it's sort of down though... It was a bit awkward and ...

Oddly enough this sounds like me, and it's really, really creepy. But true, I'm sure. "Shifting souls across my screen." Welcome to heavenandhell.com! To sort your souls just click and ...