ElizaW

Images of flowing beer and beautiful women flashed behind his closed eyes, clueing him into as to why he felt so sick. I don't mind this line, but I wish ...

I’ll start off with the things that I liked. The plot ideas and the set up are great, and the ending was a really and surprise, since I spent most ...

First, my two cents (also known as ‘the only thing that bothered me reading through this’): What in the name of hell had happened to him? Right then he should ...

Near the beginning: 'on a mission of war' seems very vague. If there was a war going on, wouldn't he name it specifically? And why would the innkeeper hint about ...

For critique, two parts stood out to me in this piece. When Erik, Valery, and Brad start talking, I wanted just a little more description than first, second, and third ...

Overall, I liked the beginning. You have a good writing voice, though I did find a few things to nitpick. The topic changed suddenly in the beginning of the conversation; ...

I actually rather liked this story. The prose is easy to read, the narrative is smooth, and I don't have any problems following it. You have a nice style. The ...