EliteHusky

This is rich in terms of content, but at the same time it feels very scattered. There is repetition, and while I understand it is part of the plot, there ...

I seldom say this to an online post, but I genuinely thought this was beautiful. Your chapter flowed incredibly smoothly with one piece of dialogue making me think twice about ...

Greetings and sorry for late answer to your request. University has held by attention for the Spring. I believe you have developed a good storyline. Ultimately the only aspects which ...

I like this. It is very original, and has a hint of personality to give it that extra 'boost'. My mum always told me life it like a trampoline, some ...

Very good! As a male reader, who is not really interested in romance stories, I found this piece captured my interest throughout. The writing style was flawed at times, such ...

Okay. One aspect of this submission I would change would be the word "dieing" to "dying". You saved my life from a prison of endless self pity and gave me ...

Very interesting, however in all honestly I still did not grasp the four-letter word you were hinting at. It's essence no-longer slumbers in vestal state. Two things here. Firstly unless ...

Despite the ending being relatively long to the rest of the poem, I would not change a thing. What I liked, perhaps the most, was the driving theme of 'love' ...

Good. The only thing I suggest you change is the "i'm" at the last line to an "I'm", it's a very minute change but it adds professionalism knowing that you've ...

Very good use of personification. If I had to rank them in order of preference I would choose the first one entitled, "Dancing with the Dandelions" although keep in mind ...

Okay. The content itself lives up to the title you labelled this piece as, "The best friend's vow", however I did feel that at times you did not maintain a ...

I was sitting in the activity room, not wanting to play in the front yard. Which has an abnormally low amount of trees, which makes it both flat and hot. ...

This would be a good country music song. I categorized in country music largely because of the nature of the lyrics, and how they revolved around love, almost like some ...

Don't hate yourself! This poem echoes ideas in the early twenty-first century that the fashion industry in conjunction with glossy magazines, pushed an impossible view of the human body. I ...

Uhm, I wrote this a few months ago ^^ It's not good... It was the first story-like thing I ever wrote in English. Comments and constructive criticism are welcome! xD ...