Elinor

What's a senryu? O.o Edit: Darn, sorry for replying to this. I know I didn't bump it but I forgot to check the dates.

Eli>> I just rewrote a large chunk of Chapter 4 last night at an awfully late time and I would like to sit on it for a while before posting ...

Can you post the next couple of chapters?

xD Snoink, I didn't think you were serious when you said this would be the title. Anyway, watch this space for a critique. -Elinor

Hi! Sorry that this was delayed. I've been very busy. School can bite, ya know? ;) Anyway! To the review. This piece struck me a bit as kind of bland, ...

Absolutely beautiful, Snoink, and totally original. -Elinor

Ah, okay. Sorry for the confusion. Seems as if I should be the one paying more attention. xD

bump- edited main post with revised version.

Ah, I see now. I have reread it and I can realize your original intentions for this piece. Just ignore me for being unhelpful xD However, maybe you can add ...

Yes, I definitely will!

And ah, Elinor -- this is a prologue, not a first chapter. Cheers *Goes back to read post* So sorry, I meant to say that it read more like a ...

xD Yes, she does suck pretty bad. And she plugs her ears and runs at the slightest critisim of her books, which I hate the most. She doesn't understand that ...

Her family is dead, I thought that'd be kind of obvious. And as for the telling, I'm not really sure what to do about that because I don't want her ...

Hey, Shina! I'm going to Chapter 1 now, like I promised. All I can remember of my days in early childhood were the raindrops that seemed to fall endlessly on ...