Elinor

Hi! So, I agree with everything that Jas and Ari have said so far, but I just wanted to expand on that comment. Poetry has certain, complex, three dimensional quality. ...

Hi! No critiques? That's a shame, because this piece is rather well-written. Oh, and one tiny thing before I start the critique, okay? You should only have titles in all ...

Hi King! Here is your review, as requested. So, I liked this. I don't think that it's as good as the other poems of yours that I've reviewed, but, it ...

Hi! So, I really liked this poem and the moral it presents. You've got a nice subtly in your poetry; you enforce the moral so it's clear enough for us ...

Hey, King! I think I remember reviewing another poem of yours where this hadn't been broken up into stanzas. It's good to see you've made an effort to improve upon ...

Hi! One thing that I really feel the need to comment on is your sentence structure. It's poorly executed, and while the story itself is good, it gets really frustrating ...

Hi! Is this a prologue? If so, it will probably need to be moved to Action/Adventure novels. You can contact a mod (someone with a light or dark green name) ...

Hi! Hmm, I don't really like this. First of all, it needs to proofread. You have a lot of silly mistakes like forgetting letters, spaces, and not capitalizing i's that ...

Hi! So, I don't know to critique this, exactly. It's obviously unfinished and I can't really see where it's leading. Your writing style is somewhat dreary, and this reads like ...

Hi JD. This was really sweet. I'm literally holding back tears right now. I can tell you loved this girl. She sounds like a really sweet girl, and I feel ...

Hi! I'm torn on what to think about this poem. It's definitely a good one on all levels, but I don't really think it was specific This is for your ...

Hi! Aww, this was so adorable. It may have been a little cheesy, but it's all good. I can really tell that the narrator loves this girl that this poem ...

Hi! I really liked this poem. You had a nice, simple and catchy rhyme scheme! I notice in a lot poems that rhymes seem forced, like the author only rhymes ...

Hi. Talk about rushed. I know that this was supposed to be amusing, but I didn't crack a laugh when I read this at all. It seems really out of ...

Hi! Okay, so I didn't really like this. Is it supposed to be an entire short film or a scene in a story? I'm confused. This was lacking story wise. ...